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I'll get by -- old new lyric.

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« on: August 08, 2019, 06:48:05 PM »
Took two old songs that never quite clicked, and combined them. 

BRIDGE IN:   
Don’t apologize for leaving.    –   Just tell me goodbye. 
Don’t attempt an explanation.  –   It won’t matter why. 
Please, don’t offer me your pity.   –   Baby, I’ll get by.   ….   I’ll get by.    I’ll get by.

VERSE: 
You asked me to tell you    –  I’d be alright if you left me now. 
You knew you were asking me to lie. 
I don’t want to be a burden, so I won’t try to change your mind. 
Go on walk out baby   –  I’ll get by.

CHORUS:   
Someday I will wonder,    why  (aye aye  aye.)   And I’m sure there will be some days when I cry. 
But you just walk on out that door, and don’t think twice about me. 
Don’t feel sorry for me. . . I’ll get by.  I’ll get by.   I’ll get by. 
Baby, Baby, Baby, I’ll get by.   –  I’ll get by.   –   Baby, Baby, Baby, I’ll get by.
 
Should I have tried to tell you  --  that I would die if you left me now? 
We both know that would never have changed your mind. 
No matter how you hurt me babe, I can’t treat you unkind.   
So, I’ll just keep pretending    –    I’m getting by.   

CHORUS:   
Someday I will wonder,    why  (aye aye  aye.)   And I’m sure there will be some days when I cry. 
But you just walk on out that door, and don’t think twice about me. 
Don’t feel sorry for me. . . I’ll get by.  I’ll get by.   I’ll get by. 
Baby, Baby, Baby, I’ll get by.   –  I’ll get by.   –   Baby, Baby, Baby, I’ll get by.
 
I lied to make it easy   –  for you to leave me here behind.   
I just kept pretending that I was fine.
I didn't want to be a burden, and I didn't try to change your mind. 
You walked out on me baby,   And I got by.   I got by. 
Somehow, Some Way Baby, I got by.   –  I got by.   –   Baby, Baby, Baby, I got by.

BRIDGE TO OUT. 
This cloud don’t have a silver lining.   –   This Cloud just brings rain. 
There’s no happy ever after.   –  There’s just loss and pain. 
Maybe when this whole thing’s over, I’ll feel all right again.   –   and I’ll get by.  I’ll get by.   

Baby, Baby, Baby, I’ll get by.   –  I’ll get by.   –   Baby, Baby, Baby, I’ll get by.
« Last Edit: August 10, 2019, 08:02:10 AM by hardtwistmusic »
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« Reply #1 on: August 10, 2019, 09:20:29 PM »
I made a lot of changes to this after posting, so I'm bumping it to the top.  Please don't feel any obligation to post a response.  I'm not desperate for responses.  That isn't why I bumped it. 
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« Reply #2 on: August 12, 2019, 06:12:13 PM »
Hi Verlon

This has a lot of pathos in it - and makes us really feel for the guy.
I think the more times he says "I'll get by" the less we believe it  ;D
I think it needs more storyline though - the verses are pretty close to the same message the chorus has.
Maybe the story could be something like:
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We moved out to the prairies to feel the country sky
That quaint Montana farmhouse seemed
Just right for you and I
But ... blah blah things went off the rails etc.  ;D

It's a good hook - just needs more flesh on the bones IMHO.
Paul

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« Reply #3 on: Today at 05:15:11 AM »
Hi Verlon

This has a lot of pathos in it - and makes us really feel for the guy.
I think the more times he says "I'll get by" the less we believe it  ;D
I think it needs more storyline though - the verses are pretty close to the same message the chorus has.

It's a good hook - just needs more flesh on the bones IMHO.
Paul

I knew (intellectually) that you were right when I first read your review.  But It took a week of "acceptance time" before I knew emotionally that you were right. 

I completely abandoned the third verse completely.  It was tacked on and redundant. 

I then wrote a new "bridge to out" to add a new element to the song instead of "more of the same." 

Thank you for what turned out to be extremely relevant and helpful feedback. 
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