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Misanthropist

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« on: August 01, 2019, 07:26:17 PM »
There's no way I'm gonna sit
There's no way I'm stand
I'm gonna lie here
I'm feeling really grand

I'm just talking and talking some more

I'm waiting for a woman
I'm waiting for a man
They said they'd be here
As soon as they can

I'm just talking and talking some more

Oh here they come
Oh here they are
To shoot me down
And bury me afar

I'm just talking and talking some more
 
They're not up for it
They're not keeping my dough
They're just lifting me
Cos I'm feeling low

I'm just talking and talking some more

The man is talking to himself
Cos he knows what's good for his health
He knows you know
He knows you know


« Last Edit: August 05, 2019, 09:38:09 PM by Misanthropist »

HappyDays

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« Reply #1 on: August 01, 2019, 11:52:49 PM »
Hey @Misanthropist,

So I see you got some clean, simple lyrics - which has always been my goal whenever I write lyrics. I'm not really sure when melody you have in mind, so I can't really grasp the flow - so I'm interested on what it'll be sounding like. However, and oddly enough (in a good way), I can hear this in kind of like a reggae-esque feel to it. The lyrics you have aren't really story-driven in my opinion; which can be used in your favour - depending on the direction you will take.

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« Reply #2 on: August 02, 2019, 08:10:53 AM »
Thanks for liking it I wrote it while I was trying to get away from my kids they were talking I haven't the foggiest what sounds to subject it to really
If you want to experiment with it please do ta very much

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« Reply #3 on: August 10, 2019, 09:15:43 PM »
Wonderfully simple, and tells a complete (if somewhat vague) story.  The vagueness is a huge positive.  Lets the listener "fill in the blanks" and adapt the story to his/her personal experiences. 

You have provided (imo) a perfect blend of "complete story" and vagueness.  That's REALLY hard to do, and you really nailed it. 

Without knowing the exact story behind this, I totally identify with the protagonist/singer/writer.  One of the best lyrics I've seen here I think.
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