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LukeArmstrongMusic

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« on: July 19, 2019, 05:59:35 PM »
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To celebrate some good news I got this morning, I thought I record a demo of "Stay", that I posted in the lyrics-section a few days ago. I changed it up a bit since then though. This is a one-take record, and I did only use one mic for both vocals and guitar at the same time.

Still, a work-in-progress that needs some fixing. It is especially the bridge I'm most concerned about at the moment, and I think the second verse, is starting to look good.

Also, i'm open to any suggestion you might have, or changes I could do.



I don’t know, If I should stay or should I go
I could easily walk out the door
Leave everything we ever built behind
I dropped my heart on the floor
For you

Is there a switch you can turn
To start a fire then make it burn

I can wait till the end of time
If there’s a chance I can make you mine
I will walk till I can’t stand anymore
If you say, please don’t walk out the door
Baby I will always stay
Baby I will always stay

You kept me closing and hoping for something more
Now I’m stuck with all of the hurt
I wore my heart on my sleeve until I got sore
To you, was it only empty words
You said

Is there a switch you can turn
To start a fire then make it burn

I can wait till the end of time
If there’s a chance I can make you mine
I will walk till I can’t stand anymore
If you say, please don’t walk out the door
Baby I will always stay
Baby I will always stay

Someday
Somehow
You’ll regret you ever let me getaway
Somewhere
Just to be with you
Anywhere

Is there a switch you can turn
To start a fire then make it burn

I can wait till the end of time
If there’s a chance I can make you mine
I will walk till I can’t stand anymore
If you say, please don’t walk out the door
Baby I will always stay
Baby I will always stay


Cheers
« Last Edit: July 22, 2019, 12:57:26 PM by Younger Hills »
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« Reply #1 on: July 21, 2019, 01:11:43 PM »
Nice one mate, I really like one take 1+1 recordings, what was your good news?
Great vocals, I love how you get passionate into the bridge and you hold the notes really well. When you sing with passion and faster your accent fades quite a bit. I hope you don't take it the wrong way but it sounds better. Great chord change at the end of the verses. Really, really good song mate.

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« Reply #2 on: July 21, 2019, 04:00:03 PM »
Thank you so much @RealKevM :)

I missed 5 credits, to get a study loan, so the good news was that I got my admission renewed so that I could retake some of my exams to get the final 5 credits so that I can get a study loan for my next semester :)
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« Reply #3 on: July 22, 2019, 02:48:20 PM »
Hi,

It's a very good basis. Everything is there, it only remains to record it more cleanly in my opinion, after correcting two or three things like for example the voice around 2'53 and 2'54. Anyway, good voice, and good melodies.

Good continuation!

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« Reply #4 on: July 22, 2019, 06:01:08 PM »
Thank you so much @Inanité_sonore! Yeah, the vocals around the bridge weren't the best on this recording, but I get some time this week to record it better and try to get out a more finished version :)
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« Reply #5 on: July 23, 2019, 01:27:39 PM »
Thank you so much @RealKevM :)

I missed 5 credits, to get a study loan, so the good news was that I got my admission renewed so that I could retake some of my exams to get the final 5 credits so that I can get a study loan for my next semester :)
Nice one mate, I really like one take 1+1 recordings, what was your good news?
Great vocals, I love how you get passionate into the bridge and you hold the notes really well. When you sing with passion and faster your accent fades quite a bit. I hope you don't take it the wrong way but it sounds better. Great chord change at the end of the verses. Really, really good song mate.
Thank you so much @RealKevM :)

I missed 5 credits, to get a study loan, so the good news was that I got my admission renewed so that I could retake some of my exams to get the final 5 credits so that I can get a study loan for my next semester :)

Ah brilliant, nice one

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« Reply #6 on: July 23, 2019, 09:05:50 PM »
Updated this with a more clean recording, using two mics and focusing more on the delivery :)
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