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Krysoe

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« on: July 18, 2019, 09:59:56 AM »
Hello All, here is a new but still very old fashion love song.  Written and recorded 100 % virtual in corporation with a good old friend in our common retirement project. Thanks in advance for any feedback.

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Tonight, my love oh tonight
see the moon is shining bright
On the path for you and me
we found a way to navigate
and to cross the stormy Sea
to find the harbor with the perfect harmony

Hey, Hey there
hey my love
can you hear me when I call
call your name
I hope to see you drifting this way
I will be waiting through all nights
and endless days

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Kiss the world with a smile
feel how it change your life.
hold my hand tonight
let’s jump to see how friends
can touch the sky

Hey, Hey there
hey my love
I feel so good to have you here
next to me
all the rest of our life
please keep staying here with me.
for as long - as you can be
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CaliaMoko

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« Reply #1 on: July 18, 2019, 01:52:20 PM »
I have two suggestions for word edits that I think work better:

"I will be waiting through all long nights"

"feel how it change changes your life"

It's a pretty ballad.

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« Reply #2 on: July 19, 2019, 07:55:33 PM »
Hi.  Maybe it is the organ but I thought this had a 60s ballad kind of feel, a bit like "Whiter Shade of Pale".  Your vocal sounds impassioned, and you layer on some nice backing vocals too.  Slightly on the long side at almost 5 minutes perhaps?  But a well produced love song - nice one.
It's all too beautiful.

Krysoe

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« Reply #3 on: July 20, 2019, 10:59:59 AM »
I have two suggestions for word edits that I think work better:

"I will be waiting through all long nights"

"feel how it change changes your life"

It's a pretty ballad.

Happy you like the song and thanks a million for the feedback I will take with me when I do a new update to the song. 
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Krysoe

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« Reply #4 on: July 20, 2019, 11:07:49 AM »
Hi.  Maybe it is the organ but I thought this had a 60s ballad kind of feel, a bit like "Whiter Shade of Pale".  Your vocal sounds impassioned, and you layer on some nice backing vocals too.  Slightly on the long side at almost 5 minutes perhaps?  But a well produced love song - nice one.
Thanks a lot for your feedback, Spot On - yes late 60's is the time I started to study more detailed and get influenced in my own music by bands from UK and US. Yes I know its a bit too long but difficult to find a place to cut :-)
The "A Silent Life Project" is about a personal challenge: 1-2 new and finished songs each month of 2017 & 2018.
Actual status: 24