IL0v3U

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Paulski

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« on: July 18, 2019, 02:09:19 AM »
Still buffing this one up but thought I'd get some early feedback if you would be so kind.  ;D

https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/il0v3u

IL0v3U

My heart is wary and weary and worn
It rarely appears on my sleeve anymore
'Cause I found a way I can shield it from harm
It's password protected and it works like a charm

It's not easy to guess it though many have tried
They all get this message "ACCESS DENIED!"
But I want you to enter so I'll give you a clue
The password is "IL0v3U"

IL0v3U
The password is "IL0v3U"

From the moment I met you I soon realized
That you hold the key to the rest of my life
But if you feel the same I won't know that it's true
Until you say "IL0v3U"

IL0v3U
This password will see you through
IL0v3U
The password is "IL0v3U"

Now, a password is stronger with letters and numbers
But if I made it longer, you might get it wrong girl
Don't get it wrong girl!

So before you have entered my heart will be blue..
The password is "IL0v3U"
« Last Edit: July 18, 2019, 02:12:43 AM by Paulski »

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« Reply #1 on: July 18, 2019, 02:00:43 PM »
You come up with such creative ideas! This is awesome! I have no nits. You're always so clever with your words.

Well, okay, one possible nit. I might leave out the word "that" in the line "But if you feel the same I won't know that it's true". And maybe in the line "That you hold the key to the rest of my life". I might. Maybe. And maybe not. So there you are...basically no nits.

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« Reply #2 on: July 18, 2019, 03:23:42 PM »
You never cease to amaze...such clever lyrics..great song.

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« Reply #3 on: July 20, 2019, 03:03:51 PM »
Ha!

Super clever lyrics Paul. It's a happy little number,massively contagious and smile inducing.

A genuine pleasure,however you decide to 'further' the piece,it's a good 'un.
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« Reply #4 on: July 22, 2019, 07:18:06 AM »
@Paulski - Really like this Paul,beautifully produced, very accurately played and generally a wonder piece of music.

Clever lyric, as Vicky would say no nits, I especially liked the way you were not tempted to add too many instruments/Vocal, that little cluster of vocals at the end was just lovely.

In my book that's July's SOTM.

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« Reply #5 on: July 22, 2019, 11:22:49 AM »
This is quite delightful love song, Paul :) Made me feel all fuzzy and happy, because it's so sweet. Not enough sweetness in the world these days  :-*
the lyrics are very clever with the password thing being such a huge part of most peoples everyday lives ;) Lovely vocals as always and I like the
simple 1+1 production :) beautifully written  :)

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« Reply #6 on: July 22, 2019, 02:14:47 PM »
Hi,
It's a very beautiful ballad, the lyrics are beautiful with a lot of freshness. The minimalist acoustic guitar accompaniment works very well.  I also like the voice, it's a beautiful interpretation and a beautiful timbre.
Nice song, actually!

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« Reply #7 on: July 23, 2019, 07:42:32 PM »
@CaliaMoko - thanks Vicky. Yeah I use "that" too much as a filler. I'll look at "that"  ;D

@shadowfax - cheers Kev though I don't deserve such praise  ;D

@Skub - appreciate that Davey. Smile away  ;D

@cowparsleyman - cheers for the generous comments - not putting too much in is more laziness than good taste, but I'm glad it still worked for you  ;D

@crystalsuzy - cheers Suzy - means a lot coming from a Canuck (now I'm going to be accused of playing favourites  ;D)

@Inanité_sonore - thank you kind sonore!

I'm glad no-one mentioned the weird chord choice at the start of the bridge - never played a G# major in the key of D before. Makes me think I may have gotten away with it  ;D

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« Reply #8 on: July 23, 2019, 09:08:13 PM »
This is, as much as it is really clever, a really beautiful ballad. I enjoyed every second of this one @Paulski :) And you have a really good voice, that fits the song very well!
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« Reply #9 on: July 24, 2019, 12:00:28 PM »
I agree with YoungerHills - Your voice is perfect for the songs you write Paul, a breath of fresh Maple Syrup.

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« Reply #10 on: July 27, 2019, 12:21:13 PM »
This one is so charming @Paulski, with those very smart and touching lyrics being its highlight.

Totally entertaining, delivered in your own inimtable style. Bravo!  :)



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« Reply #11 on: July 29, 2019, 09:08:26 AM »
Hey @Paulski,

This song just makes me want to drink some hot chocolate while I sit around the fire.

"Now, a password is stronger with letters and numbers
But if I made it longer, you might get it wrong girl"


I think this line is just right in the sweet spot of cheesy/corny (in a good way  ;)) and poetic. Hope to see more of your work!

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« Reply #12 on: August 03, 2019, 02:39:20 PM »
@Younger Hills @cowparsleyman cheers guys for the vocal comments. Maple syrup - yep as Canadian as, well maple syrup!  ;D

@MichaelA - thanks Michael. No-one would want to imitate my style  ;D ;D

@HappyDays - yep I flirt with cheezy all the time - glad it worked for you - thanks for commenting  ;D ;D

Thanks to all who took the time - I know you're busy!
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« Reply #13 on: August 10, 2019, 10:47:13 AM »
Hi Paul,

Clever lyrics very well delivered.
I kept thinking C3-PO when you were singing the chorus. Damn Star Wars for stealing my soul at such a tender age.  :)
Acoustic playing is really good - guitar sounds sweet.

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« Reply #14 on: August 14, 2019, 01:39:37 PM »
@digger72 - thanks digger. Yeah 3CPO does come to mind albeit not a very romantic little bugger  :D cheers for the guitar comment - I'm still learning that  ;D