Just had another listen to this,
Heres what I would do,
On the verse, play gently with the same rhythm, and let your vocal tell the story
Then build up the playing intensity into the chorus and let the stronger playing with your vocal ram the message home.
After the chorus get all down again, draw the listener back in.
Great work Kev, good song too just need to get some playing dynamics in.
And as usual, just my crazy way, not the highway.
Cheers
Andy