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Won't You
RealKevM:
Hello! Here's a song I wrote last week, I feel it's my best yet and i'm really excited about it. I'd love to know what you guys think to it and any suggestions for improvement are welcome. Kev :)
Won't you tell me a story
One I hope never ends
But if it's over
I'll help you write it again
Won't you sing me as sing
So I can hear your soul
And when it's done
I'll know what you know
Chorus (Changes each time from 'I'm' to 'you're' and finally to 'we're')
I'm feeling so alone
Too warm to feel cold
Look how much i've grown
I'm too young to feel this old
2nd verse
Won't you write me a letter
Tell me where you've been
And when i've read it
I'll have seen what you've seen
Won't you sail me a boat
Straight across the sea
And when the waves come down
Take shelter with me
Mikey:
@RealKevM
Great song Kev, I think this may well be one of your best, and your vocals are improving in leaps and bounds, love the hummingbird too, looks and sounds great.
Keep it up mate, Mikey
RealKevM:
@Mikey Thank you my man, you won't believe how happy I am that my vocals are finally starting to fall into place. I've been studying Richard Ashcroft, his tone and the way he delivers his vocals.
Andreas:
@RealKevM Just as Mikey said, might as well be one of your best songs, both lyrically and performance vice. Your tone is most definitely improving every time you post a new song. Nothing else to do, than to look forward to the gigs you're playing this summer :)
Well done mate!
Andreas
CaliaMoko:
I, too, am impressed with your vocal improvement, Kev. It's been my experience that most people, who have trouble matching pitches and regulating their singing tones, give up. Your determination is really paying off! I think that is just great!
Vicki
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