Summer Heat

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CaliaMoko

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« Reply #15 on: July 01, 2019, 12:55:06 PM »

@Jambrains Thanks! I appreciate the confirmations!

And for everyone who wonders what he's talking about when he says
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...the organ has to stay...

Viscount Cramer kindly built me a demo version and mixed in my vocal, so I replaced the existing SoundCloud version with his.

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« Reply #16 on: July 02, 2019, 12:28:28 AM »
And now I've replaced it again with a simple 1+1 demo. Again. Although I think I might have done a slightly better job on the Bm chords than last time. ???

Anyway, based on all the feedback (plus some more from some people I know), I've done a bit of editing and adding to the song. The link is still the same and the updated lyrics are on the SoundCloud page (and below, in case you like to see them here).

I have one remaining question. No, wait! Two questions. (1) How’s the tempo? (2) This is kind of a three parter. At about 0:43, 1:18, and 1:58 there’s a pause of one measure before the “Sissy ain’t a bad girl” line. Does that work, or should I take it out? Does it depend on the production?


SISSY AIN’T A BAD GIRL

INTRO
Sissy ain’t a bad girl;
She’s just suff’rin’ from the summer heat! Summer heat!

VERSE
Sissy always plays a lot, and she will show you what she’s got
Especially in the summer heat
Bikini body on the beach; you’ll see her teasing out of reach
Especially in the summer heat.

CHORUS 1
Sissy ain’t a bad girl
She’s survivin’ in a man’s world
Using just the tools she knows
Her hair, her shoes, her skimpy clothes

VERSE
Sissy’s learning what to do on the beach as well as school
Another kind of summer heat
Teachers, students, even Dad, indoctrinate what’s good and bad
And put the blame on summer heat

CHORUS 2
Sissy ain’t a bad girl.
She’s learning it’s a man’s world
And in her dorm room late at night
If anyone could hear her cry
They’d hear her asking, “Who am I?”

INSTRUMENTAL BREAK (yeah, I know it's just me da da da-ing)

CHORUS 1
Sissy ain’t a bad girl
She’s survivin’ in a man’s world
Using just the tools she knows
Her hair, her shoes, her skimpy clothes

VERSE
Sissy always plays a lot, and she will show you what she’s got
Especially in the summer heat
Bikini body on the beach; you’ll see her teasing out of reach
Especially in the summer heat.
Especially in the summer heat.
Especially in the summer heat.


[Copyright 2019 Vicki Morrison Goble]

Neil C

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« Reply #17 on: July 06, 2019, 06:05:33 PM »
Vicky,
I could do you a backing track if you pm with the bpm etc.
:-)
Neil
songwriter of no repute..

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« Reply #18 on: July 07, 2019, 10:26:47 AM »
Hi Vicky,

great song, strong melody and well sung.

Keith

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« Reply #19 on: July 22, 2019, 03:46:31 AM »
I have an update on this one. I wanted a gritty (or at least grittier than my 1+1) version, and Neil volunteered to help me out with that. So I know have an updated version of this. Plus the name has changed to "Sissy Ain't a Bad Girl". Here's the new version: . I kept the old version, too, and I'll add this link to the original post for anyone who wants to compare.

Thanks to everyone who listened and the feedback, which all helps me think. :D

And, thanks, Keith, @diademgrove for the complimentary words!

Vicki
« Last Edit: July 25, 2019, 11:27:34 PM by CaliaMoko »

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« Reply #20 on: July 22, 2019, 07:13:11 AM »
Hi Vicky @CaliaMoko - Very pleasant tune, everything lilts along nicely, superb melody line, hooky as hell.

My only suggestion is to stick 2 more vocal tracks over the chorus, 1 the same as the Lead Vocal and the other a simple harmony, both off centre, might add some contrast to the song...

Nice to hear you plying again, after such dark times Vicky.

Hope it helps

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« Reply #21 on: July 22, 2019, 10:54:45 AM »
Lyrically you are fantastic, Vicki! :) You have a good folky/country voice with a nice tone to it. The lyrics give me good country-vibe, and the production is well done.

 
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« Reply #22 on: July 25, 2019, 11:30:59 PM »
Thanks @cowparsleyman : I do want to add some harmony to this. I hadn't worked out how to do that yet. On my list.

I appreciate the lovely compliment, @Younger Hills ! Thanks!