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I don't have you

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Wicked Deeds

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« on: May 15, 2019, 08:10:08 PM »
I found an acoustic recording of this song that I wrote in February. It would be a shame to hide it away. In case I never get around to recording.  I thought I'd at least share the lyrics. Simple and directly from the heart these are the lyrics to a song called "I don't have you."


I don't have you



I will walk like others do,

work then sleep it's true

but I won't have you.



I will wake, then raise my head,

mourn for love that's dead.

No, I won't have you.



I remember every detail of that year.

The universe aligned and we were there.

The stage light falling gently on our skin

Informed us that our time should then begin.



So we kissed like lovers do,

declared a love so true.

Now, I don't have you.



We road trains and boats and planes,

Walked ancient cobbled lanes

Now, I don't have you.



In the early evening sunset on the sea,

the coastline disappeared then we were free.

We swam through crystal water to the beach.

Sadly now, the shoreline's out of reach.



The curtain falls and the lights dim.

The actors take a bow.

The exit door has now opened

We should leave but I don't know how.

I don't have you.

I don't have you.



Written by Paul Vasey 2019
« Last Edit: June 07, 2019, 04:13:22 PM by Wicked Deeds »

Neil C

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« Reply #1 on: May 15, 2019, 10:15:31 PM »
Paul,

Heartfelt, neat and succinct.

Nothing more needs to be said.

:-)
neil
songwriter of no repute..

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« Reply #2 on: May 25, 2019, 03:42:21 PM »
@NeilC my friend. Thank you ver you much!

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« Reply #3 on: June 07, 2019, 01:46:42 PM »
We should leave but I don't know how.
What a great line and what a great lyric Paul.
Super word economy.
Simple heart-felt message.
I'd love to take a stab at music for this one - right up my alley.
..but I suspect you have that nailed as well :D

Paul

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« Reply #4 on: June 07, 2019, 04:21:26 PM »
Hello Paulski,

I do have harmony and a vocal melody for this and will one day go on to produce my version.  However, please feel free to work your magic on these lyrics. 

I had to take a break from producing so haven't done anything since since Christmas but certain songs demanded that they should be written. Six in total, all on acoustic guitar and all waiting for my studio to be set up again in July.

My favourite imagery for this song is:

I remember every detail of that year.

The universe aligned and we were there.

The stage light falling gently on our skin

Informed us that our time should then begin.

I'm also very fond of:

The curtains fall and the lights dim.

The actors take a bow.

The exit door has now opened

We should leave but I don't know how.

I'm looking forward to your interpretation. This is a really emotional song.

Good luck.
« Last Edit: June 07, 2019, 04:25:19 PM by Wicked Deeds »