I'd say that's love

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Wicked Deeds

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« on: May 25, 2019, 03:41:00 PM »
I recently met someone who told me about the Japanese art of kintsugi that involves repairing broken ceramics which then become more refined, perhaps more beautiful because of the "scars."  My interpretation is that that people who experience devastating loss or pain and then go on to heal through self improvement, are much the same.

I'd say that's love

Your tender heart may break into a thousand shards of pain.
We cast aside; discard  the old, replacing them again.
I've heard it said, this need not be,
There's still a place, we'll wait and see.

I'd say that's love.

Our precious scars are turned to art, refined and worn with pride.
Perfection serves to to teach us of the flaws we cannot hide.
Such beauty here before my eyes
Should search for life un-compromised.

I'd say that's love.

Love knows the path that two people should follow; it's true.
The method, the madness, the whimsical sadness of you.
it knows the fire that burns the lover scorned.
What once was whole can then be readorned.

I'd say that's love

Your tender heart may break into a thousand shards of pain.
We cast aside; discard  the old, replacing them again.

Written by Paul Vasey May 2019
« Last Edit: May 26, 2019, 07:27:41 PM by Wicked Deeds »

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« Reply #1 on: May 29, 2019, 11:13:06 AM »
This was a very original approach to what love is. Not like the cliche pop songs about how they feel or what they want to do. If this is how you feel about someone, well, "I'd say that's love" :) This was a wonderful read, Paul!

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« Reply #2 on: May 31, 2019, 05:10:02 PM »
@ Younger Hills, thank you sincerely my friend.

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« Reply #3 on: May 31, 2019, 11:50:22 PM »
Hey Paul
I'd say that's a good lyric  ;D
Nice rhyming, great sentiment.
You stay true to the hook.
No nits from me.
Hit record my friend!
Paul

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« Reply #4 on: June 05, 2019, 08:59:11 AM »
Really nice. Articulate.
The idea is very skillfully communicated.

That one line with readorned. I'd scrap the then,
I'd get at least one syllable out. 

Can't wait to hear it.
It's either this or that, then again it might be the other. 

I can promise you a future of slow decline.

Don't eat the yellow snow

And there you have it. 

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« Reply #5 on: June 27, 2019, 04:56:35 PM »
Paul,

Cool wordsmithing, like it a lot.

:-)

Neil
songwriter of no repute..

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« Reply #6 on: June 30, 2019, 11:18:36 PM »

  Hello,
    This is a good write, plenty to admire. My only nit is the word "readorned" can't really say why. It sounds kinda forced, or maybe it's just the word itself that takes some getting used to. Small nit, big song.

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