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Girlinside

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« on: May 24, 2019, 12:50:06 AM »
Sometimes I don’t know how I carry on
trapped inside a body
not able to show the world who I really am

Wanting to destroy myself

redrhodie

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« Reply #1 on: May 26, 2019, 07:06:12 PM »
Hi Katie,

Rather than destroy yourself, what if you went through a metamorphosis, like when the caterpillar becomes the butterfly? Just an idea.

Hope you're doing okay. I'm glad to see you back. I've been super busy but I'm starting to find time to hang around here more, a good sign. Anyway, these are very painful lyrics as they are. I don't like them for that reason. They feel hopeless and self destructive.

Take care,
Lynn

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« Reply #2 on: May 26, 2019, 09:53:10 PM »
Hello Katie. These are very bleak words. Often times, writing is about sharing our deepest emotions. It's a cathartic process to communicate to the world our deepest feelings. I too wear my heart on my sleeve. It's imperative that you craft your lyrics to really engage your audience. The brief words that you have written, jump of the page as an omission of pain. If you could develop your ideas further, utilising rhythms and a rhyming structure, this would engage us all further. Hope things work out for you.

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