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« on: May 11, 2019, 09:15:17 AM »
Hi!.....I've been working this for a little while.......What do you think????

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Verse 1:
The tailor measures bodies
The undertaker stiffs
The doctor helps with babies
Just startin'  on their trips

The preacher counts the lives he's saved
The gambler grabs the prize
The seeker tries to save his soul
The politician lies


Chorus:
The world keep spinning faster
And nothing seems to last
The promise of the future seems
Much shorter than the past


Verse 2:
The postman brings us letters
The cook prepares our gruel
The soldier loads his deadly gun
While we all play the fool

We turn away in horror
Pretend that we don't see
This world that we've created
Ain't what we hoped might be


Instrumental Chorus

Verse 3:

Our graves are overflowing
With what we have  come to reap
Seems sorrow and confusion
Is all we'll get to keep

Chorus:
The world keeps spinning faster
And nothing seems to last
The promise of the future
Grows shorter than the past

ScottLevi

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« Reply #1 on: May 11, 2019, 11:23:14 AM »
Hey Igg

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The world keep spinning faster
And nothing seems to last
The promise of the future seems
Much shorter than the past

Real talk.

I dig it man, got that sophisticated simplicity to it. Obvously well thought out and put together so nicely.

Picked out the chorus cos it tethers the sentiment perfectly but there's so many hard-hitting lines throughout. No chance to ignore the message reading through.

I think they're great! :)

Cheers,
Scott



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« Reply #2 on: May 11, 2019, 02:01:00 PM »
Really love this one! It tells a story that I think, most people could relate to.

The song has a great message and the chorus is spot on!

Excellent work on this one! :)

- Andreas
Where the Hills are young, the Souls are old

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« Reply #3 on: May 13, 2019, 07:34:39 AM »
I think it’s a clever song well done x

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« Reply #4 on: May 13, 2019, 11:05:10 PM »
Wow. Love this one. Especially this verse:

The preacher counts the lives he's saved
The gambler grabs the prize
The seeker tries to save his soul
The politician lies
Then darkness fell
As the 1st God and the 2nd burned in hell
And all alone
Stood the 3rd God looking wearied to the bone


- War of the Gods : ©2005 Sterix

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« Reply #5 on: May 14, 2019, 05:02:24 PM »
Hi Guys....

Thanks for the feedback.....very appreciated...!

Scott - Good to see you again Scott --   It's a heartfelt topic for me...Thanks!
Andreas -  Tried to capture the general disaffection for the whole picture through the highlighted examples.... I wish it were not so!
Girlinside -  Thanks for the comment and sentiment
Sterix -  I tried to keep it as tight as possible and engage the imagination to fill in the world

igg



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« Reply #6 on: May 30, 2019, 02:36:17 PM »
This is very charming.
Quite promising, it had me considering music for it during the first read through.
You're good at this, aren't y'all? 
It's either this or that, then again it might be the other. 

I can promise you a future of slow decline.

And there you have it. 

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