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Alibi (new song from Lostboy & Jambrains.)
LostBoy:
Hi everyone,
Jam and I are excited to share this one with ya! All I had was a melody and some gibberish...and some truly epic beatbox!🤣🤪 Jam heard it and immediately sent back a file drowning out my magnificent beats with some Real bad ass drums and guitar...the rest is...a really long, boring story...😆..but finally...here we are.😎👍🏻 I had a blast with Jam as always!
All thoughts are welcome! And thanks for listening.😄🎶👊🏻🎶
https://soundcloud.com/sky_lanterns/alibi
Lyrics
Zoe’s eyes show her resolve
And I love her more
Our hearts beating fast
She pulls outside the bank and it’s time.
I feel the sun, it’s freedom on my face
But God we need the cash, I pull down the mask
Cos I don’t see another way...oh no.
Chorus.
This is the part where you tell me
Everything is gonna be alright
Taking a chance on a feeling
Oh no, this is the part where you tell me
Everything is gonna be alright
Baby’s got an alibi.
Engines running, I come stumbling
Bag of cash in hand.
But some stupid guard took a shot
I wasn’t armed just a finger, in a jacket
I feel the sun, grow colder on my face
Zoe hits the gas, I’m losing blood fast
I see her wipe a tear away...oh no.
Bridge.
I know this wasn’t the plan
Pull over, you’ve still got a chance
I throw her the cash
I kiss her tell her don’t look back.......drive!
Sunduta:
Really strong melancholy (usually I prefer joyful/positive songs, but this one is neat). My attention was focused on vocals and solo guitar in the end. Lyrics are exceptional and enhance painful impression.
mickyplankton:
This is exceptional. Top drawer. Everything about this song just clicks. Singing is great. The guitar is superb and the story dramatic and tragic. Absolutely love the production. Every element shines. And the siren and the way it builds in the last 3rd elevates this to pretty much a masterpiece. Great great work guys.
Movin Flavour:
Good song guys.
A real Rock Anthem.
Love the vocal, drums and those brilliant guitars.
Song has a real 80s feel.
Top tune.
Sandeep
LostBoy:
@Jibbek Thanks buddy. We appreciate it.😁👍🏻
@mickyplankton Haha!! Easy with that "M" word Micky. I'm glad you like it so much mate. It was a lot of fun to put together for sure and yes Jams music is nothing short of fantastic!! Thanks man!😎🎶👊🏻🎶
@sandeep thanks very much as always mate. 😁🎶👊🏻🎶
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