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Younger Hills

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« on: April 12, 2019, 09:00:41 PM »
Wrote these lyrics when I hit a rough patch in life, and I started reminiscing about my past, and how I used to be.

This is probably the most personal lyric I have ever written so far, but feel free to give me all the feedback you want :) Right now, I only have one verse, but I don't know if I need a second.

(Verse)
You tell me that it’s alright
You know shit about my fight
Every day I put on a smile on my face
But everyone knows its fake
What difference does it make
If I’m happy or I just pretend
It’s a choice that I take
We’re all going to die in the end
(Pre-Chorus)
I’ve been pulling away from you
I just had a lot to go through
There’s so much I should have told you
Is it too late for me now
If sobriety was the right call
Why I’m I the only one to fall
I would have given you my all
Would you please forgive me
(CH)
Maybe I wish my anxiety would stay
It was all I had that eased the pain
If I would have given up on life
Closed my eyes and found piece
(Post-Chorus)
That’s not me
That’s not me
That’s not me
Living life on pills with anxiety
That’s not me
That’s not me
I’ve given up life with anxiety
(Pre-Chorus)
I’ve been pulling away from you
I just had a lot to go through
There’s so much I should have told you
Is it too late for me now
If sobriety was the right call
Why I’m I the only one to fall
I would have given you my all
Would you please forgive me
(CH)
Maybe I wish my anxiety would stay
It was all I had that eased the pain
If I would have given up on life
Closed my eyes and found piece
(Post-Chorus)
That’s not me
That’s not me
That’s not me
Living life on pills with anxiety
That’s not me
That’s not me
I’ve given up life with anxiety

« Last Edit: April 13, 2019, 03:47:59 PM by Younger Hills »
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Dogmax

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« Reply #1 on: April 14, 2019, 09:27:09 PM »
Hey man first my thoughts on your laid out hope you don't mind, you say you have only one verse but to me that's because of the way you have your lyric lines laid out, you take away (Pre-Chorus) (CH) (Post-Chorus) let your lyric breathe you know what i'm saying let them talk back to you.

I'm hearing piano and that's a good thing, i've read your lyrics a few times keep writing man and don't let those none reviewers put you of believe me, you got a true way with words man   8)

Younger Hills

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« Reply #2 on: April 14, 2019, 09:53:02 PM »
Thanks a lot man! :) I just spitted out lines, and a few didn't hang together, so every section is like a different story about me and my life, so then I just got the way it is lined up now :p I wrote it on guitar, but today I was thinking a piano ballad.
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Neil C

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« Reply #3 on: April 17, 2019, 03:23:09 PM »
Hi,
Lots to like here, make sense and good rhyming scheme.
Chorus good and smart.

Look forward to hearing what you do with it as a song.

 :)
Neil
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Younger Hills

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« Reply #4 on: April 17, 2019, 03:49:56 PM »
Thanks, @Neil C  :) The song is in the finished songs section! :) 
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