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Exotic Dancer (Spring Quest Entry)
pompeyjazz:
Sticking with the Exotic / Erotic theme, here's my solo entry for the comp. A bit of a cheery singalong number although it's sad really :)
I met her on the train to Paris
Eurostar carriage
She's a part time dancer
Now she's got the answer
Six weeks solid at the Moulin Rouge
Accommodation, drinks and food
And all the tricks are free
Oh I'm not a chancer
You're my exotic dancer
No, I'm not a chancer
But take a chance on me
The so called job was just and audition
Sad admission
Didn't have a ticket home
No one to phone
The only way from dancing dole
Was sliding sleekly down a pole
Failing reputation, and none of the tricks were free
Oh I'm not a chancer
You're my exotic dancer
No, I'm not a chancer
But take a chance on me
It started as exotic and ended as erotic
Everybody's got their bills to pay
Just another drink and it all begins to sink
As you say goodnight and start again next day
Oh I'm not a chancer
You're my exotic dancer
No, I'm not a chancer
But take a chance on me
(c) Bradley – 2019
PaulAds:
This is a really great song, John...lyrics are funny and tragic too...it's like something from Galton and Simpson...and a super bounce/sing along blast.
You and Neil have just about got this competition sewn up!
Off for another listen now...brilliant!
dinnerwithgreedo:
I love your rhyming!! Words i'd never think of in a million years
Movin Flavour:
Some clever lyrics for. A very sad subject.
Great story telling here.
Love the production, vocals and a cool way to bring the song to the end.... Love the guitars too.
A good listen.
Sandeep
PaulyX:
This has a glitzy fairground sparkle to it John.
Lovely contrast between the upbeat feel to the music and the seedy lyrics.
I liked the surf-guitar style reverb sounds too.
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