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I Have Been A Sailor

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montydog:
Hi,

Here is a new song from me. It's about someone who has spent their life at sea and despite all the dangers and hardship, when the sailor is old and reflects on his life, it's these times that were the best. I hope you like it and feel inclined to comment.

M

https://soundcloud.com/alan-walker-4/i-have-been-a-sailor

I have been a sailor for many a long year
There's salt water in my veins
Used to be a whaler off the bleached bone shores
Through the freezing Nantucket rain
The freezing Nantucket rain

I have run through storms with waves so high
I thought every breath was my last
With the wind so strong it tore up the sails
And smashed the matchstick mizzen mast
Smashed the matchstick mizzen mast

Still I live for days when the anchor weighs
And the sea whispers low
"If you sail on me I'll set you free
Just a sure as the north winds blow"
Just a sure as the north winds blow"

I have been drunk in bars under the stars
In a town near Abeline
Sat up all night as the Northern lights
Turned the skyways green
They turned the skyways green

I killed a Bristol man with my bare hands
Caught him stealing from the crew
Watched my young man drown
In some harbour town
There was nothing I could do
There was nothing I could do

So if you meet an old man at the sailor's rest
And he's sitting, staring out to sea
Buy him a drink and hear his tales
For that old man might be me
That old man might be me

I still remember days when the anchor weighed
And the sea whispered low
"If you sail on me I'll set you free
Just a sure as the north winds blow"
Just a sure as the north winds blow"

rightly:
I enjoyed reading the lyrics first, obviously first rate
I wasn't expecting the music and production to be so dynamic, then the solo!
This song has it all. 

Excellent work! 

Furry61:
It's a nice lyric Alan, reminiscent of GL but the song is a departure from that style which is nice. It is a good job all round for me.

Geoff

Neil C:
Alan,
You continue to play to your lyrical and vocals strengths and have added top quality arrangement and production. All sounding present and correct.

Lots to like in this tune. From the story, your vocals and the rhythmic playing, to the neat touches of mandolin, accordion and slide solo.
All sounding effortless, like an organic band should.
Did I say I liked it?
Going to have another listen..
:-)
neil
   

pompeyjazz:
You tell a very good story here Alan. Great imagery conjured up. Super playing and production. I like the effect you've got coming in on the beat in V2 (couldn't work out what it was) A bit of accordion thrown in works well. And a bit of murder thrown in there as well. Ooh - Nice solo as well

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