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Dogmax:
Sorry but i was just wondering does work in progress include lyric in progress, if it does then.

Does anyone have a old fashion stand up bass  8)


Hmm Hmm

Do I say goodbye or will a text do

Hmm Hmm

Do I look her in the eye and tell her we're through

Hmm Hmm

Do I just stay away and block her calls or maybe

I continue to pretend hmm hmm what do I do hmm hmm


Nobody knows I'm torn between two worlds

Her's that she enjoys and mine that I want back

On my own hmm hmm on my own hmm hmm

That devil bell rings life is crazy but I don't want to hurt her don't want to break her hmm hmm hmmm I like her to much hmm hmm


Do I say goodbye or will a text do

Hmm Hmm

Do I look her in the eye and tell her we're through

Hmm Hmm

Do I just stay away and block her calls or maybe

I continue to pretend hmm hmm what do I do hmm hmm


That devil bell rings life is crazy but I don't want to hurt her don't want to break her hmm hmm hmmm I like her to much hmm hmm then
(cut wait a minute sorry forgot to switch the phone of sorry I got a text hmm hmm hmm hmm}


WTF she breaking up with me, shite woman you WTF


Okay I didn't read that text so lets continue


Do I say goodbye or will a text do

Hmm Hmm

Do I look her in the eye and tell her we're through

Hmm Hmm

Do I just stay away and block her calls or maybe

I continue to pretend hmm hmm what do I do hmm hmm

Do I do now Hmm Hmm

hardtwistmusic:
I liked this from start to finish.  The twist near the end where SHE texts to break up is absolutely priceless. . . but then HIS decision to pretend not to have gotten it is even better. 

WONDERFUL lyric.

cowparsleyman:
@hardtwistmusic - has a lot of potential indeed, can't decide which genre would suit best, punkl, hip hop and folk would all suit it!!!!

Regards

Rich

Dogmax:
Thank you both for your thoughts on this really great to read, as for genre never thought about it usually with me it's just acoustic and vocals but I'm not thinking of recording anything at the moment, but on these lyrics maybe even a female singer teenage bubblegum pop style, change a few words.

Thanks again guys.

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