https://soundcloud.com/tributetoalexanderbatta/another-manHi, this is a song which I wrote four years ago. I am sending this acoustic bit for feedback. It could be considered finished but I still write around it from time to time. Here is a version where my mate sings it for me. Only thing that I changed are the lyrics to the second verse and the bridge as I did not consider them to be good enough.
let me think what you think of this version. I never considered it as finished. I am looking for comments on completeness ( is something lacking like another bridge or solo part?) lyrics (are they okay, gramatically and if they sound weird or are they okay though they do not rhyme and if they flow), and melody.
Another man
I was walking down the streets
just to see that you
haven't changed at all
Tonight I'll be haunted by this dream
where Ill be catching the sparks
flying from your heels
Chorus
Oh where are you now
I need you
You're the drug to which I'm always coming back
Oh my heart dropped
when I saw you
walking down the streets with another man
-Break-
Verse
You said it won’t happen again
and that it didn't mean a thing
oh don’t you say it ain’t so
Now I see the truth in front of me
All you do is talk
You're lucky words don't bleed
Chorus
Bridge
another man
replaced my hand
in this dead end street
of no man's land
Chorus