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I Won The Lottery (well not me personally, but it's a song!)

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« on: March 02, 2019, 12:59:28 PM »
Hi all, here is my latest, which has gone through three different lyrical treatments to get to this! I felt like binning it many times, but now glad I didn't as the lyric slog results finally won me over. So ...a tale of love and revenge from the old school -  maybe a bit daft in parts, but that's the way I cook 'em.  ;)



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Lyrics:

When you walked out of the door
Didn't want my love anymore
You called me a loser
A complete waste of space
Though I was left on the floor
Not for long was I feeling sore
You’re less than attractive
With egg on your face

Cos I won the lottery
I'm buying a yacht for me
And you can go rot baby
I'm feeling mean
Cos I won the lottery
And you my dearest sweetest
Won't see a bean
What a shame


When you left me for Hippy Lee
Took my TV and my old settee
And all that you left
Was a sad Adele CD
But I won't find someone like you
I'd be mad if I wanted to
I want nothing but the worst for you
Bit childish, though true

Rpt Chorus

On my tropical island
All sun, sea and white sand
I think of your misery
In your bedsit with Hippy Lee

Oh I won the lottery
So kind that you picked for me
The numbers that came up for me
I'm living the dream
Oh I won the lottery
Across the sea I can hear you scream
What a shame

Rpt Chorus

What a shame
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« Reply #1 on: March 02, 2019, 09:32:55 PM »
What a great idea for a song @MichaelA Absolutely loved the irony of it all. I love the way that you can conjure up a story and then construct a song around it. I've got pictures in my head similar to reading a great story. Loved the tropical island interlude and phone call. Mix wise, the only thing was the piano riff that was maybe a little loud but hey, that's small beer on what is another excellent track

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« Reply #2 on: March 02, 2019, 11:57:51 PM »
Love the topic and teh lyrics "all that you left was a sad Adele Cd" - love it!

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« Reply #3 on: March 04, 2019, 12:53:19 PM »
Thanks for that @pompeyjazz, I have tempered that piano track now. Funny how when you're mixing for ages you just get deaf to what's really happening!  ;D Thanks for the other encouraging comments too!

Also thanks for stopping by @RealKevM , and glad you like those lyrics!  ;)
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« Reply #4 on: March 04, 2019, 08:01:32 PM »
Yeah...another great idea for a song :-)

There is a guy I used to work with who got divorced a few months before his (ex) wife hit the jackpot...he always had a face like a smacked arse, anyway...but I doubt that episode helped his state of mind much.

Great lyrics and I like that piano riff too!
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« Reply #5 on: March 04, 2019, 11:59:46 PM »
Lots to like here Michael. Cleaver lyrics and catchy melody.
Great listen thanks
:-)
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« Reply #6 on: March 05, 2019, 01:43:15 AM »
Nice Tune Mate!!

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« Reply #7 on: March 05, 2019, 08:36:28 AM »
Your lyrics remind me a little of Chas N´Dave :):):)

Very nice song...love the message as well. I´d do exactly the same I´m sure. The piano riff holds it all together very well. I also like the middle 8 with the harmonies, they make a nice change. Great track!

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« Reply #8 on: March 05, 2019, 08:38:17 AM »
Very nice - it’s long, but due to the story telling doesn’t seem to be at all. The organ works very well.


The Adele section is inspired. Back in the day it would have been Phil Collins I suppose! If only karma could be relied on to do the right thing. In my world, she and Lee would be bound to win the lottery...


Look forward to Part 2, I lost the lottery (when my ex sued me)...


Cool and creative stuff.



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« Reply #9 on: March 05, 2019, 03:29:13 PM »
Hi,

Oh, the vitriol! Great idea for a song and some very clever lyrics and great rhymes with lottery. I can't say anything negative about the song although for me the musical setting is a little harsh - particularly the drums but that's just my taste.

Made me laugh out loud and so glad you persevered with it.

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« Reply #10 on: March 06, 2019, 10:09:40 PM »
Well you've done it again @MichaelA ... Love the lyrical idea and some of those rhymes are inspired "Lottery / yacht for me" being my favourite..

Production and instrument choices great, use of sound effects (phone, screams) are great and confident..  Harmonies work really well. Most of all, I love the theme - it's original and suitably quirky!

Beautifully done!

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« Reply #11 on: March 08, 2019, 12:32:04 PM »
Thanks for all these comments guys, much appreciated!

@PaulAds , great story about your work friend and his lottery winning ex-missus! The world is cruel sometimes! :)


Thanks @Neil C , glad it made you happy! Same @macker71165, cheers.

Cheers @MartynRich , don't say you would do the same thing or the God of the Lottery won't let you win!!! That's my theory anyway, but ...mmm, yeah, come to think of it, it would be hard for me too to want to share it with my ex, even though many years have now gone by since our split!  ;)

Hi @adamfarr , I like that idea for a sequel. If I ever made some money from this song (a first!) I am sure I would try to milk the idea for all it was worth! Ha! Could be a whole series of songs - or even a concept album - if that's what it took to make a shameless buck!  ;)

Hey @montydog , thanks for appreciating the lyrical theme even though the music wasn't your exact cup of tea! Really pleased to hear you say it made you laugh!

Hello Karen, @MonnoDB , glad you liked it, especially as you heard the first version of the lyrics, which were entirely different! I wasn't sure you would appreciate the scream, based on some previous comments you've made when I have gone OTT. Maybe you are finally getting used to me!  ;D Poor thing! ...but thanks for this encouragement.




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« Reply #12 on: March 08, 2019, 03:11:36 PM »
Lol. Absolutely delightful. 
A common enough tragedy with an incredible happy ending.
Wow.  :D
It's either this or that, then again it might be the other. 

I can promise you a future of slow decline.

Don't eat the yellow snow

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« Reply #13 on: March 08, 2019, 08:26:35 PM »
Yo Michael.

The sweetness of the best served cold dish!  :D

A brilliant idea for a song and superbly implemented.

A neat slide into the bridge section.

Top marks for rhyming lottery with yacht for me.

Clever song.  8)

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« Reply #14 on: March 12, 2019, 09:01:34 PM »
Thanks there @Rightly and @Skub, glad you both enjoyed the joyous story. Very cathartic it was for me, although sadly I have not yet won the lottery! I will do though! Soon! ;)
My latest novel: pls check it out!

‘Gavin & The Bodysnatchers’, a quirky comedy crime thriller. Easily found on Amazon.

https://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/B09GZ7C8M7?ref_=pe_3052080_397514860