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TRIPLE GAZE
Misanthropist:
TRIPLE GAZE
There goes Goldilocks her Paris frocks with her hair in a bun
Mincing about town under a blue sun
Well she thinks it’s blue and pinkie hue la la
She twitted liked and followed the latest craze
It was a man’s triple gaze
Triple gaze like a boss
Sideways and across
The triple gaze went everywhere off course
Hashtag it to the lady in drive-thru divorce
She loves trend setters spreading good news
Especially the meme in phase
It was a man’s triple gaze
Triple gaze like a boss
Sideways and across
Even my star jumping great great great nan
Who likes playing bingo while having a scan
Ran out in the street and looked much younger
what did she need apart from x-ray
it was a mans triple gaze
Triple gaze like a boss
Sideways and across
Follow triple gaze
Like triple gaze
Hashtag triple gaze…..
Triple gaze the craze
Dogmax:
I really do like this every line and verse draws you right in fantastic use of words but why triple gaze, would not crystal gaze flow better with understanding 8)
Misanthropist:
i see no clear gaze I'm afraid in view of the ubiquitous online sociability what I had in mind was a gaze of a man in the street amiable harmless but she is too busy to notice it with her head on the smartphone screen the second one comes from a man lustfully or insidiously gazing at her profile pictures online third gaze is woman’s own caused by excessive selfie taking which I purport distorts her reality it might as well be a man’s gaze
thank you though ta
Dogmax:
Yeah okay triple gaze gave the harmless views of a man but the imagery you have in your lyric is
(Triple gaze like a boss Sideways and across
The triple gaze went everywhere off course)
I just thought crystal gaze and it's meaning of future imagery might flow better on reading but triple gaze will do, nice one.
jte:
I like that one! Nice flow and well balanced metaphores.
"Drive through divorce" made it into my long term memory i guess;)
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