[SoundOnTape]

This is a song that i wrote. I am waiting for your critics about it.

There may be mistakes but here's a traslation of the lyrics.

What should I wait for?
Where should I walk through?
While your dream is standing in front of me.

May I swim to the green?
May I cover myself with blue?
Whatever I have, to make you happy

(It's) A dream. And another dream. I may give to you maybe someday.
Will I slide from your finger to the other?
Will I freeze with the wire of your hair?
Will I fall right in front of you from the rainbow?
Will I get compassion from your eyes?

(It's) A dream. And another dream. I may give to you maybe someday.
Where are you now?
In which house is your light?
Whom are you with?
Will you look at me and smile for a moment someday again?

[PaulyX]

Hi, hello and welcome.
Very nice open string, suspended chords and unusual chord patterns, I liked that a lot.  It has an airy, wide open feeling to it.
You have a very strong voice too, very comfortable in that higher register.  Although I can't understand the words without the translation, I could tell you sing them with passion.
It's a bit long at almost 6 minutes, I'd be inclined to condense it down a little.
May I ask what the language is?

[SoundOnTape]

[SoundOnTape]

Hi, hello and welcome.
Very nice open string, suspended chords and unusual chord patterns, I liked that a lot.  It has an airy, wide open feeling to it.
You have a very strong voice too, very comfortable in that higher register.  Although I can't understand the words without the translation, I could tell you sing them with passion.
It's a bit long at almost 6 minutes, I'd be inclined to condense it down a little.
May I ask what the language is?

Thanks for the reply. It's in Turkish.

[Dogmax]

Hey man no defense  i like your style the lyric part of this forum is sometimes good for blowing of steam, check it out and grab what you need 

[MartynRich]

This is a very different style of song. Your guitar playing is excellent and very stylistic - it reminded me a little of some Zeppelin stuff but it feels much more modern in many places. The chords changes are hugely inventive.

It has a very folk structure, with no real standout hook - this isn't a problem for me and maybe that's because of the language but some others may mention it. However, it does sound totally heartfelt. The coda is very bizarre though - musically excellent but not 100% sure it's needed. But hey, that's taste - it's your music man and you perform it brilliantly.

[SoundOnTape]

This is a very different style of song. Your guitar playing is excellent and very stylistic - it reminded me a little of some Zeppelin stuff but it feels much more modern in many places. The chords changes are hugely inventive.

It has a very folk structure, with no real standout hook - this isn't a problem for me and maybe that's because of the language but some others may mention it. However, it does sound totally heartfelt. The coda is very bizarre though - musically excellent but not 100% sure it's needed. But hey, that's taste - it's your music man and you perform it brilliantly.

Thank you for listening. I think about the critics of other musicians.

[pompeyjazz]

I really like this. I love Turkish music and have listened to quite a lot of it since my first visit to Antalya in 1988. I love the way that you have retained the drone chords and used some of the eastern style vocal patterns. Great work. Original and interesting

[pompeyjazz]

Btw, I'm just listening to Duble by Babazula