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MartynRich

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« on: February 21, 2019, 09:01:22 PM »
Minimalism eat your heart out.

This is as stripped down and as raw as I can get - hope you like it. Lyrics at the link.

https://soundcloud.com/martynrich/crossfire

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« Reply #1 on: February 21, 2019, 09:50:51 PM »
Nothing wrong with stripped down and raw Martyn and it's a great reminder to think beyond the production bubble and think about the song. I thought this is such a clever piece of music,  emotional and poignant. A slap around the face to all those "modern"  singer songwriters who have such feckin affected voices that I am genuinely amazed that people like that shit. I love your music Martyn. You keep it REAL  :)

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« Reply #2 on: February 21, 2019, 09:58:15 PM »
Yo Martyn.

This is very affecting. A convincing cry from deep down.

I remember the first time I heard NINs and their song Hurt,it blew me away. This has that same desolate,heartbroken feel.

I'm in love with the melancholy,the reflective and this has it all in spades.  8)

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« Reply #3 on: February 22, 2019, 12:57:58 PM »
@MartynRich - Getting a bit busy here,maybe lose the Vox and the gtr  8)...Got it absolutely bang on, the Lyrics are the main thing here, and too much going on in the background always detracts from the message, so yeah, cool song.

Maybe a 2nd Voice in the Chorus would add something different to the listener.

Daniel Baremboim once said music is all about space, the music has to breathe, and this does.

Nice work.

Rich


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« Reply #4 on: February 22, 2019, 01:16:38 PM »
Hi Martin,

Lovely emotional feel to this, Played well and vocals convey great emotion. Especially like the subtle elec GTR in the background.

Massive thumbs up here dude,

Andy

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« Reply #5 on: February 22, 2019, 11:50:13 PM »
Really good man really cool  8)  but sing the lyric words with chords man

Love it but i dont want too if you know what i mean   8)

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« Reply #6 on: February 23, 2019, 02:48:59 PM »
That second guitar drifting in and out of the main rhythmic arpeggios is very clever and subtle, just adds enough interest without spoiling the stripped back feel.

Nice passionate edge to those vocals, selling the emotion. Yeah, as mentioned above a dual vocal at the end would not go amiss.

Decent image on your SC for the song too!

Really like this, cheers!
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« Reply #7 on: February 23, 2019, 07:39:48 PM »
For me, this is real music.  One guitar (or instrument) and one voice with very little else. 

Not that I don't love lush arrangements and production values. . . but if a song REQUIRES those things, then it's not a good enough song.  If it can't be effectivelly played and sung just like this, the song itself is (imo) lacking. 

Too often lush arrangements and production values substitute for excellence in songwriting.  This was wonderfully written and wonderfully performed.  It did not need anything more. 

Maybe it could have used a little more, but clearly did not NEED more.  Very impressive to my ears.
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« Reply #8 on: February 24, 2019, 12:41:29 AM »

this is a special track
i wouldnt do anything to it
vocals alive and the guitar and back drop so visual
fills the room
beautiful aching song
may it take you somewhere martyn
brilliant
i may not believe this tomorrow...

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« Reply #9 on: February 24, 2019, 10:36:50 AM »

 Hey Martyn, welcome back ;D ;D

 Mighty fine song  ;D  beautiful music, that set's up your vox really well.
 Amazing vocals, beautiful delivery and performance. Just love it my friend ;D

 A real song  ;D ;D ;D

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« Reply #10 on: February 25, 2019, 09:30:41 AM »
What a great song!

Loved the stripped-down thing...lyrics are excellent and it's very cleverly done. Voice sounds great too.

One of the best that I've heard for a while on here.

Off for another listen now  :)
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« Reply #11 on: February 26, 2019, 12:00:39 AM »
Thank you all for your amazing comments so far, I feel very humbled as this an extremely personal song. I am sat with hands firmly under my backside so as not to tamper with it anymore.  ;D

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« Reply #12 on: February 26, 2019, 12:20:29 PM »
Yoooooo....welcome back fella!!

It's great to hear something new from you Martyn. This is a really lovely and engaging song. You sound fab on it! I don't have much more to say than that mate.

Great stuff and keep em coming!! 😁🎶👊🏻🎶

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« Reply #13 on: February 26, 2019, 03:12:36 PM »
Good song indeed, with some poetry in the lyrics that provoke some thought and don't reveal all on the surface, which I like.


I might have tried a bit less reverb on the vocal and maybe put some on the master bus to try to keep the voice and instruments in a similar sounding space (but that may be missing the point...)


Great stuff

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« Reply #14 on: February 26, 2019, 04:50:39 PM »
i dig it.

i connect with the minimalism.  it is my preference normally, in music, and most things.

chronicity - i ponder what you are going for with this.  unsure.

at a few places, particularly in chorus, the vocal seemed to really jump out volume wise, maybe a bit too much.

there were a couple of pitchy spots vocally.  you may be completely aware and ok with them. i generally don't mind things getting a bit pitchy.  i'm sure a few listens and i would be completely familiar with them in this performance, and accepting of it.