The Other Side

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pnb99

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« on: February 04, 2019, 04:54:39 PM »
Hello,  here is a little ditty what I wrote.

It's basically about feeling separated and trying to connect(re-connect)

Hope you enjoy..




THE OTHER SIDE       120BPM

Verse 1
So Here it is
Tracing a line on a 5 inch screen
With each beat, one more chance, with nothing to say.   

Pre-Chorus 1
For here in my world
Love is dangerous, love is sold
Makes my blood run cold

Chorus 1
Here, on the other side
Far from the battles in your head
Here on the other side
Living off the promises we made

Verse 2
And I pray; We return to that place some day
And I pray; all our foes will be gone away

Pre-Chorus 2
Oh Deep In my soul, feel the heat rise up again
The trace is placed on hold

Chorus 2
Here, on the other side (you give me hope, you give me love, you give me everything to bring me home)
Far from the battles in your head
I’m here on the other side (you give me hope, you give me love, you give me everything to bring me home)
Living off the promises we made

Bridge
Got a feeling like a nervous child
This is all I need
Want to share with everyone
We’re free

Chorus 3
Here, on the other side
Far from the battles in my head
We’re here on the other side
Living all the promises we made

Outro/Adlib
I never thought that we’d be leaving
I thought that we were here to stay   
I saw our house fall down around me
Just give it time she always said

Binladeda

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« Reply #1 on: February 04, 2019, 05:05:12 PM »

 Hi

 "little ditty" ;D ;D .  Wish I could write little ditty's like that. ;D

 Classy stuff.  You obviously know your onions, so no crits from me...
 I loved it ;D . A professional package, ready to go, as far as I can hear (I'm deaf in one ear)
 A joy to behold my friend  ;D

 Welcome to the forum.  Looking forward to hearing more of your work

Nowt as queer as folk...........my gran

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« Reply #2 on: February 04, 2019, 05:22:15 PM »
Very pro sounding. Well put together, nice harmonies man  :) Welcome to the forum  :)

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« Reply #3 on: February 04, 2019, 08:11:26 PM »
This is great. Reminds me of the someone.... but i can't place it.
Remember.... it's just my opinion. It doesn't make me right. Although i probably am ;)

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« Reply #4 on: February 05, 2019, 07:59:19 AM »
There's a lot to like here
good production and vocal Performance.

but for me it's a little too fluffy. Sounds like 80's Mainstream.

I like the harmonising.
lol. pros n contras all the way through. Well done.
It's either this or that, then again it might be the other. 

And there you have it. 

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pnb99

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« Reply #5 on: February 05, 2019, 10:08:04 AM »
@Binladeda Many thanks for your generous review...It's always great to hear that someone enjoys what you've written.

@pompeyjazz Getting the vocals right was a real challenge, particularly in the arrangement at the end as there's a lot going on in the mic. Glad you appreciated it.

@dinnerwithgreedo Well thanks....it reminds me of all sorts of eighties influences...which is what I have :-)

@Rightly Thanks...I really do try to work hard on the production, I'm still very much in "learn" mode. As for "fluffy and 80's mainstream"? Well, the real world narrative is less fluffy...but the 80's mainstream description is apt. I'm continually trying to take myself to a harder edge, but keep going back to what I know/like/grew up with. Its all good fun.

Thanks again everyone.

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« Reply #6 on: February 05, 2019, 12:34:58 PM »
Welcome to the forum @pnb99 and what a great entrance you've made with this very pro sounding track :o the intro is amazing :o
It's really well arranged :) I love the way you go from full on harmony vocals, to just the bass and one vocal :)
Your vocals/BV's are amazing 8) Lot's of interesting instruments coming and going as well, which really kept me engaged :)
I agree it's got that eighties vibe going on(which I personally love), but it also has a bit of a gospel vibe, which I also love  8)
Fantastic first song on this forum...can't wait to hear more from you :)

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« Reply #7 on: February 06, 2019, 08:39:09 AM »
Welcome to the forum mate. You've got something special here, loving some of the chord changes especially the first part of the chorus, it sounds so perfect.