Jeremiah's Heaven

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Skub

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« on: February 04, 2019, 03:32:21 PM »
Yo beautiful people,an anti war song forya.

Rudi (F.R. Kniel) approached me a while back with a story of Jeremiah,a young man made to go to war for his country. The experience left him dehumanised and bitter for what he had lost.
His actions during the conflict also left him unable to forget,heal or move on with his life.

Then he met Emily and everything changed,she became the catalyst for his recovery. So in some ways Jeremiah regained his faith and realised Heaven is where you find it.

I found Rudi's synth lines to be very moving in conjunction with the storyline,so his instrumental base allowed me very quickly to fashion a song which I hope captures Rudi's initial idea,even though the lyric is very comprised from the original text.

The song lyric relates the story from Jeremiah's perspective.


When your country calls
You must go to war
That's when you find for sure
Just who you are

Oh the things we had to do
To our fellow man
I'd love to forget it all
But I don't know if I can

Need someone to rescue me
Show me the way
Restore my faith again
Can't bear this pain
Another day

She saw me cry and held my hand
Took away the pain
Made me feel that I could be
A real man,once again.

Now the nightmares fade away
She gently helps me stand
My eyes are open,now I see
Now I understand

Just me and Emily
That's all it takes
I'll be here each morning time
I'll be right here
When she wakes

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« Reply #1 on: February 04, 2019, 05:16:53 PM »
Ah ! You already know what I think of this song @Skub It's simply a beautiful piece of work. Firstly there's a great story and it's been treated sympathetically and cleverly. Lovely instrumentation and loads of little subtleties going on together with the trademark vocals. I really do love this song big time  :) :)

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« Reply #2 on: February 04, 2019, 06:25:33 PM »
I love it. No nits. It was wonderful to put on my headphones and get lost in the sound of this. A little bit of an escape for me.

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« Reply #3 on: February 04, 2019, 08:08:17 PM »
This is beautiful... almost haunting.
Remember.... it's just my opinion. It doesn't make me right. Although i probably am ;)

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« Reply #4 on: February 04, 2019, 10:19:22 PM »
Listening with headphones on means that your guitar sounds like someone pouring honey into my ears.

Very nice set of lyrics too. I recently read "enemy at the gates" by William Craig...which is about Stalingrad...not just the sniper duel sub-plot that was made into a film...although I liked that too...especially the late, great Bob Hoskins as Nikita Khrushchev

"You WON'T give up the river bank. I don't care if you lost half your men. Lose the other half. Lose yourself."



I had an idea and this makes me want to write that up into something suitably horrifying.

This is really beautiful, Davy. If only there were enough Emily's to go around...

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« Reply #5 on: February 04, 2019, 11:16:46 PM »
@Skub this is beautiful.. I love particularly the vocals - there's real emotion in your delivery. The harms are lovely. Gorgeous guitar work - wow! And all the instrumentation is beautifully done.

Just a gorgeous piece of work. I love it!

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« Reply #6 on: February 05, 2019, 09:29:51 AM »
listening now.

great start…

ah. I can relate…

ooh, them guitar licks  :)
restraint in the voice works great (young uns can rarely do that).


Well done
Was a real pleasure!
It's either this or that, then again it might be the other. 

And there you have it. 

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« Reply #7 on: February 05, 2019, 08:39:43 PM »
Hi Skub,

This is great, love the story and lyrics are real nice,

Also loving that davy vance guitar style, there isn't any room for me to comment of soundcloud.

Love all the guitar licks that wrap around that looooooow bass

Nice work chaps.

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« Reply #8 on: February 07, 2019, 08:28:01 PM »
@pompeyjazz

Thankya J.
Rudi's ideas do fire me up.  :)

@CaliaMoko

Hey Vicki,if it helps ya at the moment,it was a song well worth doing.  :)

@dinnerwithgreedo

Thanks.  :)

@PaulAds

Honey in the ears? Maybe I need to get over and help bin out with his aural tackle!  :D

War is brutal and most of us can only touch the edge of the horror. For that at least,I'm glad. Thanks for your ears and comments Paul.  :) Go for that song and pull no punches.

@MonnoDB

Greatly appreciated Karen,your comments carry weight with me.  :)

@Rightly

I'm glad you connected Maestro.  :)

@Cawproductions

Thank you Andy or Mikey,I never know who's logged in!  :D

You can still post a comment on s/c even if there's no room,I read them down below anyway.
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« Reply #9 on: February 08, 2019, 06:45:16 PM »
What a great fusion of synth and guitar, it all comes together to create one of those musical atmospheres you just want to sink into and lose yourself.

Terrific song and fantastic musicianship and skill throughout!

Sorry can't be more constructive. So I'll just be a fan instead.

Oh...and sweet ending!

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« Reply #10 on: February 08, 2019, 10:59:51 PM »
Yeah that’s lovely Skub. Put me in mind of “Brothers in Arms” a bit.
Is it the same 4 chords on the synth all through? It’s amazing you manage to not make that sound repetitive... plenty of texture and variation in what you layer on top of it. I particularly liked the way the drums come and go, and trade places with those arresting harmonies. Vocals are great as are the guitar solos.
It's all too beautiful.

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« Reply #11 on: February 14, 2019, 03:28:42 PM »
@MichaelA

Ha! Thanks Michael.  :)

@PaulyX

Yeah,it's the same chords,just stuff dropped out and put it to keep some sort of dynamics going. Thanks for listening carefully Pauly!  :D
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« Reply #12 on: February 14, 2019, 06:36:15 PM »
Hi Skub. I shuddered when I saw how long this was, but the 5 minutes went by in a flash. It's a song that pulls you in and nurtures a contemplative mood. Love an anti war song although I would class this as more of a love song (not that the two can't converge) it's a good addition to your canon. Nice work. Micky.

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« Reply #13 on: February 18, 2019, 05:55:36 PM »
It's so good - I love the way you kept things simple and left the vocals so naked for so long. The churchy organ glues everything together and provides a foundation for the little details over the top.
A really effective song and very touching too - nothing preachy but a clear message too. Super stuff.