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« on: January 22, 2019, 04:36:18 AM »
I've been trying not to start new lyrics.  It hasn't been working.  This one started out as a throwaway that wouldn't lead to anything, then just kept getting more and more workable til I had to finish it. 

I'm looking for a title.  I think I'm looking for a refrain with a nice hook to it also.  Even though it seems overlong, it also seems incomplete.  Not thrilled with the chorus either if someone has some ideas.

"Ours To Destroy"

CHORUS: 
Doesn’t it seem just a little bit odd.   –  When it all goes wrong, we just blame it on God. 
Or we blame it on Satan.  It couldn’t be us.   –  Twas somebody else threw us under the bus. 


VERSE 1. 
This urban nightmare began as a dream,   –  A noble ambition, a stewardship theme.   
The best of intentions can go to extremes. -- Sometimes a great notion is less than it seems 
Visions of progress, and riches untold.  –   We stole from the past and the future was sold.
We’re certain that fortune must favor the bold.  --  A shiny new future grown tarnished and old. 
 
CHORUS: 
Doesn’t it seem just a little bit odd.   –  When it all goes wrong, we just blame it on God. 
Or we blame it on Satan.  It couldn’t be us.   –  Twas somebody else threw us under the bus. 


VERSE 2. 
Once all the prairies and forests were green.  –   The air was still pure, and the rivers ran clean. 
Improving on nature, was our strategy.  –  In the home of the brave and the land of the free.
Conquer we must, we were born to be great.   –    What we don’t find useful we exterminate.
We take what we need to control our own fate.    –   By the time we are sorry, it’s often too late.   

CHORUS: 
Doesn’t it seem just a little bit odd.   –  When it all goes wrong, we just blame it on God. 
Or we blame it on Satan.  It couldn’t be us.   –  Twas somebody else threw us under the bus. 


SHORT VERSE TO OUT: 
Fine Sunday words about peace, love, and joy.  – But the words don’t distract us, they’re just a decoy.
God can’t resist us, the earth is our toy.   –  Here is the motto we seem to employ.
“God gave it to  us, so it’s ours to destroy.” 
“God gave it to  us, so it’s ours to destroy.”
“God gave it to  us, so it’s ours to destroy.”
“God gave it to  us, so it’s ours to destroy.”

   
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« Reply #1 on: January 24, 2019, 05:27:45 PM »
Hey,

Just a fly-by for now but had a read and couldn't help thinking
"For God Sake" or "For heavens sake" might do nice, keep g that holy spirit but along the "ffs" sentiment of abusing our world.

Very nice read!
Cheers,
Scotr