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ScottLevi

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« on: January 10, 2019, 09:04:46 PM »
Hey everyone/anyone,

Hope you're all doing well.

I haven't been around but you're all still very much in my heart. Even the newer folk I haven't met, love yas too.

Been doing a lot of reflection lately and realised how dangerous self-deprecation can be. I see us all do it, underplaying our abilities and beauty of expression in music, and I'm sure other parts of life too.

Being confident is being vulnerable, having pride gives opportunity for criticism and taking yourself seriously can lead to disappointment. It's much more easy to convince yourself that you're no good, untalented, worthless - than that you're good, talented, unique and valuable.

I want you to know that I think you're great. Literally, anyone I meet who is in anyway expressive brings a great smile to my face. Creativity and expression is what makes us human in world of machines; and anyone strong enough express their creativity is a a hero to humanity for keeping that distinction alive.

Not looking for feedback on this, not writing it to make a song, or for anyone but me. You know.. I am great, this lyric is perfect as it represents how I felt at a time, and because I am so relatable, artistic and articulate - there's a good chance one of you will take something positive away.

A request to myself for love.

You kill with kindness,
Wont you hold my hand?
I'm wide-eyed your highness,
Please present your plan

I'm ready to follow wont you lead-me-along
Grab the scruff an'.. lift me up an'..
Give me love an' never leave me alone,
...

My back's been on the market never sought never baught
Wont you get it for me like it eats your every thought
I'll keep being me, always chewed up just from livin'
But if you just pull your weight then maybe we could make it even

I see you helping others in a sense of obligation
Wont you be so kind; and extend to close relation
'Cos Im need of your love, and running out of patience
So feed me your love, and none will be wasted

I've a long road ahead do not think I can handle it
So I'm reaching outward inward to rely on your companionship
I know you got in me; to carry through rancid
'Cos you'll do it for another in a blink if they'd had asked it

The darkness follows strong, you gotta' keep me past it
I feel it pulling back, like a tether from elastic,
Alone I've not the strength to fight back or outlast it
Togther we are hench and hold the power the blast it

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1 step lets not ****about *hit hit*
Half of that's where we lookin' now *hit hit*
Don't even matter if we not there *hat hat*
No toys to be chukin' out *hit hit*

Look at that that's movement *hit hit*
Didnt' even know we were doin' it *hit hit*
Imma share this little progress *hat hat*
So it don't feel so bo-gus


Much love,
Scott.

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« Reply #1 on: January 10, 2019, 10:09:55 PM »
Man, so good to see you back here. Life is indeed an unpredictable game and I can relate to your thoughts very personally. Your lyrics are inspiring. Well thought out and spot on. Always up for a collab with you man so if you want me to get a backing track together PM me. We need guys like you on the forum big time so keep the faith man as there is a huge amount of love and respect for you on here  :)

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« Reply #2 on: January 12, 2019, 12:56:28 PM »
Hi Scott

Great to hear from you again  :)

Super open and honest writing...trademarks of yours, I reckon.

Keep writing and posting, buddy...we're with you all the way  :)

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« Reply #3 on: January 15, 2019, 09:09:48 AM »
Right up my street - I love the flow and things like "handle it / companionship". The elastic verse is really good too, actually they all are.


Just add a beat, and this could be a winner I think...


Awesome. (I'll take your cue and say "we're all awesome", thanks!)

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« Reply #4 on: January 19, 2019, 11:04:19 PM »
I really like most of this.  I saw it awhile ago, and filed it away to come back and read again.  Now that I've done so, my best suggestion is to keep your best lines and cut this amost in half.  The best lines are incredible, but some of the "not best" lines reach too far in the search for a rhyme.  (IMO). 

It's got incredible potential imo. 
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« Reply #5 on: February 01, 2019, 11:21:51 PM »
Hey everyone/anyone,

Hope you're all doing well.

I haven't been around but you're all still very much in my heart. Even the newer folk I haven't met, love yas too.

Been doing a lot of reflection lately and realised how dangerous self-deprecation can be. I see us all do it, underplaying our abilities and beauty of expression in music, and I'm sure other parts of life too.

Being confident is being vulnerable, having pride gives opportunity for criticism and taking yourself seriously can lead to disappointment. It's much more easy to convince yourself that you're no good, untalented, worthless - than that you're good, talented, unique and valuable.

I want you to know that I think you're great. Literally, anyone I meet who is in anyway expressive brings a great smile to my face. Creativity and expression is what makes us human in world of machines; and anyone strong enough express their creativity is a a hero to humanity for keeping that distinction alive.

Not looking for feedback on this, not writing it to make a song, or for anyone but me. You know.. I am great, this lyric is perfect as it represents how I felt at a time, and because I am so relatable, artistic and articulate - there's a good chance one of you will take something positive away.

A request to myself for love.

You kill with kindness,
Wont you hold my hand?
I'm wide-eyed your highness,
Please present your plan

I'm ready to follow wont you lead-me-along
Grab the scruff an'.. lift me up an'..
Give me love an' never leave me alone,
...

My back's been on the market never sought never baught
Wont you get it for me like it eats your every thought
I'll keep being me, always chewed up just from livin'
But if you just pull your weight then maybe we could make it even

I see you helping others in a sense of obligation
Wont you be so kind; and extend to close relation
'Cos Im need of your love, and running out of patience
So feed me your love, and none will be wasted

I've a long road ahead do not think I can handle it
So I'm reaching outward inward to rely on your companionship
I know you got in me; to carry through rancid
'Cos you'll do it for another in a blink if they'd had asked it

The darkness follows strong, you gotta' keep me past it
I feel it pulling back, like a tether from elastic,
Alone I've not the strength to fight back or outlast it
Togther we are hench and hold the power the blast it

---

1 step lets not ****about *hit hit*
Half of that's where we lookin' now *hit hit*
Don't even matter if we not there *hat hat*
No toys to be chukin' out *hit hit*

Look at that that's movement *hit hit*
Didnt' even know we were doin' it *hit hit*
Imma share this little progress *hat hat*
So it don't feel so bo-gus


Much love,
Scott.

Personally your intro is your highlight not your your liric, sort the difference out  8)