Delicious Grace - Chaos and Shame

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alcapone_dudu

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« on: December 27, 2018, 01:58:49 PM »
Hello everybody. I usually don't write about this particular subject but I couldn't help it. Here it goes a political statement about something really wrong. Take it for what it is.



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alcapone_dudu

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« Reply #1 on: December 27, 2018, 02:01:35 PM »
Lyrics:
 
Em Brasília 19 horas...

To find chaos and shame
You don’t have to go this far
Just take a look
Everything is falling apart

To find chaos and shame
You just have to turn on the news
The president is dead
That shouldn’t have been so cruel

You may find hope
In a blind spot
The lies are laying down
And you people has been cursed

Get out of my way
You’re the one to blame (Shame! Shame!)
I sure don’t need your greed
And you can’t ask for mercy

chorus:
There’s no way to run
There’s no way to go
If I saw you
Standing so close
There’s no way to know
There’s no way to go
If I saw you
Standing so close

To find chaos and shame
What happened to progress?
You’ve betrayed the nation
With your promises

To find chaos and shame
Just pull the trigger
Your time is up...

chorus:
There’s no way to run
There’s no way to go
If I saw you
Standing so close
There’s no way to know
There’s no way to go
If I saw you
Standing so close
 
Para o povo liberdade
Para o Brasil democracia

Tinitus95

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« Reply #2 on: January 05, 2019, 12:34:38 PM »
Hey, I think your singing would improve alot if you learn a little more about breathing and where to put your resonance.

alcapone_dudu

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« Reply #3 on: January 07, 2019, 02:29:23 PM »
Hey, I think your singing would improve alot if you learn a little more about breathing and where to put your resonance.

Hi @Tinitus95, thanks for listening to my song and for the heads up.

I agree with you that the singing department needs to get better. That's my main focus right now.

bigFishAndTheSmallPondets

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« Reply #4 on: January 10, 2019, 07:19:35 AM »
As a politically charged protest song I personally think it strongly evokes a feeling of inescapable despair. To me, it has a slightly loose, unconventional feel - almost a little punky to my ears which also fits the mood I think. Well done (and best wishes to all in Brazil!).

alcapone_dudu

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« Reply #5 on: January 12, 2019, 01:14:40 PM »
As a politically charged protest song I personally think it strongly evokes a feeling of inescapable despair. To me, it has a slightly loose, unconventional feel - almost a little punky to my ears which also fits the mood I think. Well done (and best wishes to all in Brazil!).

Thanks, bigFishAndTheSmallPondets. I'm glad you could get an idea of what I intended to pass through the music.

I face this like a duty for me as a songwriter. It had to be done. That's my weapon to fight back all the bullsh*t we're getting from those ''fake-politicians''.

Inanité_sonore

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« Reply #6 on: January 12, 2019, 07:12:07 PM »
Hi Alcapone_dudu,

I really like the sounds of your song, very good vocal interpretation, and very nice voice with a lot of character. That’s a good the song !
There may be a little too much saturation on the voice in the chorus.
Some problems mixing : drums deserve to be a little more forward.
The sound of the guitar solo is a little too synthetic for my opinion.

Very nice job anyway !

IS

alcapone_dudu

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« Reply #7 on: January 14, 2019, 07:24:54 PM »
Hi Alcapone_dudu,

I really like the sounds of your song, very good vocal interpretation, and very nice voice with a lot of character. That’s a good the song !
There may be a little too much saturation on the voice in the chorus.
Some problems mixing : drums deserve to be a little more forward.
The sound of the guitar solo is a little too synthetic for my opinion.

Very nice job anyway !

IS

Thank you for taking the time to listen to my song. I'm glad you liked.

I agree with you on those points you've highlighted. We'll get there, my friend.