Your Hearts on Fire - AtticVibes

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Mikey

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« on: December 08, 2018, 08:35:52 PM »
Hi Guys

Here is the new track from Andy @Cawproductions and myself, its another AtticVibes style song with Indy and Rock influences, hope you all enjoy it and make sure you have the volume right up.


Lyrics:

Verse 1:
I could tell by way,,, you looked at me……and I was seeing red. Yeh yeah
you wear a disguise but I could tell in your eyes…..its wasn’t anything you said
so cold, so bold, ya sold me the dream….coz you’re a bitter pill to me
Now your saying nothing…but I can hear your guilty plea

Chorus:
Your hearts on fire
But you’re an Icarus baby and you,re gunna get burnt
Your hearts a liar….
But you’re a sinner baby….and there’s nowhere to turn

Verse 2:
Flying close to the sun, Yeh you were the one ….and then you tore my soul away
I was holding you back but you were outta control……But I could never make you stay
I couldn’t hold on coz you were doing me wrong….and then I find you’re cheating
You were telling me lies and its you I despise……..and now my heart’s stopped beating

Bridge:
maybe we could make it work again
But ya gotta give up now on your cheating ways
maybe we could make it work again
Now I’m on my knees to make you stay..…………

pompeyjazz

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« Reply #1 on: December 08, 2018, 09:39:11 PM »
Yay. Great stuff guys. I just listened to it when it popped up on my FB feed. There's some lovely Mark Knoffler guitar licks going on throughout. Maybe I would cut back on a few of them to get the listener wanting more. I loved when the heavier guitar kicked in and thought that the M8 was particularly good. Another cracker from the @Cawproductions hit squad  :)

PaulAds

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« Reply #2 on: December 09, 2018, 08:35:36 AM »
Sounding excellent again, fellas.

Really enoyed this one...the guitar playing and sound is super, and the production sounded wide and clear...very accomplished. Mission accomplished.

Top notch stuff.

shadowfax

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« Reply #3 on: December 09, 2018, 09:41:50 AM »
This is a crackin song guys..just a shade too many guitar licks for me..particularly over the vocals, became a bit of a fight for supremacy....

but up there in the quality stakes for sure... :) :)

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« Reply #4 on: December 09, 2018, 02:56:58 PM »
"You're an Icarus baby and you're gonna get burnt" - that will do for me - brilliant chorus including that line. This is a great sounding track with some lovely lead guitar work. Sounds very commercial to me. Excellent work throughout.

M

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« Reply #5 on: December 09, 2018, 03:33:07 PM »
Great sounding track and stand out lyrics, especially verse 1.


I’d probably agree that the lead guitar bits could be more in between the vocals, or perhaps drop then in verse one to prioritise those lyrics, but that would be the extra 1% only.


Very accomplished writing, performing and producing.

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« Reply #6 on: December 09, 2018, 09:18:11 PM »
This is brilliant.

Love the guitars.... Real hints of Oasis.

Icarus Baby....clever lyrics.

Well done guys.

Sandeep

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« Reply #7 on: December 10, 2018, 11:53:54 AM »
I always look to the lyric and these are pretty good, personally I would change end of V2 to 'why won't my heart stop beating?' It gives a sense that the singer finds the situation unbearable, as it is now you're already dead so why the angst. JMHO Geoff M

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« Reply #8 on: December 11, 2018, 06:22:42 AM »
Hi All,

Thanks for listening to our track.
@pompeyjazz @PaulAds @shadowfax @montydog @adamfarr @Movin Flavour @Furry61

Really please that a few peeps commented on the lyrics as they aren't our strong point. so a big thanks for that.
@Furry61 good suggestion matey, that last line would have worked great. Cheers

The icarus line we had a debate whether is should be either "you're Like Icarus" or "you're an Icarus", but the latter flowed better, so we went with it.

We hear ya all ref the guitar licks, listening back, yeh maybe a bit much, Note taken, something to watch out for in the next tracks.
I will have to reign in @Mikey before he starts to kick over amps n stuff.

Anyway
Thanks to all.

Jenna

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« Reply #9 on: December 11, 2018, 07:46:22 AM »
Great stuff. Agree with all of the points made above, some of which I would have never noticed had they not been mentioned during my listening experience. Love this tune. Love the lyrics, even though a couple of tweaks here and there might help add some power and flow. But in all honesty, what listener actually notices if the lyrics make sense or not when it comes to those finer details?

Somehow, I wanted to hear the background vocals more strongly. Not sure if it was the guitar drowning them out or just my personal taste.

Hope all of your gear manages to come through the critiques intact and ready for the next musical adventure. Rock on. You do it well.

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« Reply #10 on: December 11, 2018, 02:48:12 PM »
Hi guys, excellent stuff, really enjoyed this. Great guitar playing and guitar tones, and the singing and melody work really well too.
Nice one!
Cheers
Jamie

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« Reply #11 on: December 11, 2018, 11:30:31 PM »
Sterling work as always lads, reminds me a bit of Shed Seven in places.

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« Reply #12 on: December 12, 2018, 02:07:34 AM »
Loads of attitude in this one - lead vox and drums stood out as gems 4 me.
My only nit is the fire/liar couplet - it's kind of road weary from so many songs and an old fart like me has heard 'em all too many times..

Enjoyed the listen!
Paul

Mikey

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« Reply #13 on: December 16, 2018, 07:18:49 PM »
Hi to everyone who commented on the song, a big thank you for taking the time, and thanks for all the great feedback, I take your point about the guitar and the vocals clashing in a couple of places, next time I will tell Andy to turn the vocals down a bit :)

Cheers, Mikey

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« Reply #14 on: December 16, 2018, 08:40:20 PM »
So slick guys - no surprise there.. Vox fab! Yes maybe a little upfront! Love the melody of the verses particularly.. agree that the lyrics are great.. Very catchy little number.. Big thumbs up from me..

K