Hello! I wrote the music to this a couple of days ago and in this past hour put some lyrics together. This is very much a first demo so please excuse the odd bum note. I'm recovering from a cold too so the vocals aren't great either (not that they ever are). I'm asking for feedback and guidance, the song is in it's early stages. The melody isn't fully formed and i'm sure the lyrics could do with tweaking, Is it too corny? The chords are G, Em. Am. D throughout (capo 5) lyrics below
https://soundcloud.com/realkevm2/number-one-demo/s-bqYh5Lyrics
Chorus
Which boy you gonna take home?
Who's heart are you gonna break?
Will you leave all alone
Stop making the same mistake
1st Verse
Been a while since i've been out
Didn't see you but i heard you shout
Across the street down to your friends
Saying things that the devil sends
It's that dark I can't see you at all
Do you even see me when I fall
When the club played out favourite song
Like Tinchy said you'e my number one
Chorus
2nd verse
Remember we'd park out in my car
Talk and smoke til it got dark
And how you'd make us laugh
Banging on about my autograph
That bus has long gone home
and we dont go to that disco
I'm back out in the street
LIke I never skipped a beat