Number One (1st demo)

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RealKevM

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« on: November 26, 2018, 03:32:26 PM »
Hello! I wrote the music to this a couple of days ago and in this past hour put some lyrics together. This is very much a first demo so please excuse the odd bum note. I'm recovering from a cold too so the vocals aren't great either (not that they ever are). I'm asking for feedback and guidance, the song is in it's early stages. The melody isn't fully formed and i'm sure the lyrics could do with tweaking, Is it too corny? The chords are G, Em. Am. D throughout (capo 5) lyrics below https://soundcloud.com/realkevm2/number-one-demo/s-bqYh5

Lyrics

Chorus

Which boy you gonna take home?
Who's heart are you gonna break?
Will you leave all alone
Stop making the same mistake

1st Verse

Been a while since i've been out
Didn't see you but i heard you shout
Across the street down to your friends
Saying things that the devil sends
It's that dark I can't see you at all
Do you even see me when I fall
When the club played out favourite song
Like Tinchy said you'e my number one

Chorus

2nd verse

Remember we'd park out in my car
Talk and smoke til it got dark
And how you'd make us laugh
Banging on about my autograph
That bus has long gone home
and we dont go to that disco
I'm back out in the street
LIke I never skipped a beat




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« Reply #1 on: November 26, 2018, 09:25:49 PM »
No song is too corny, in my opinion, if the arrangement suits it. I think this would be a kick-ass punk song :)

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« Reply #2 on: November 26, 2018, 10:07:10 PM »
It's sounding mighty fine to my lugs @RealKevM . I must say that the double tracked vocals remind me of somebody else on this forum .The song is as catchy as hell so you MUST peruse it  :)

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« Reply #3 on: November 28, 2018, 09:52:35 AM »
@allhurtanimals cheers, I really like the arrangement i've done here, it's different to what I usually do.

@pompeyjazz Thank you Sir. The chorus is mega isn't it? I can't get it out of my head lol I tend to always double track my vocals as it helps with the sound of my voice I think. Thanks for checking it out, it's early stages and i'll be focussing on this one for sure,

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« Reply #4 on: December 02, 2018, 02:50:23 PM »
Hi kev,

Cool song in the making here, tidy up those vocals phrasings and you all the makings dude.

Nice

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« Reply #5 on: December 03, 2018, 04:30:46 PM »
@Cawproductions thanks so much!