[ThomasThomas]

I post another simple song, a bit more lively - I hope you would like to listen

You've heard it all before
and yet I'm all alone
I've tracked down every door
I guess I'm at the core

Disappointments
these apples on the tree keep falling down
bitter disappointments
I find myself asleep in guzzle town

I never knew your name
I never knew the shame
to be the one to blame
I guess it's all all the samme

Disappointments...

Oh please come along and please
and make it ever seem
I never knew, I never knew

You've covered me in gold
the singing birds alike
a pretty tune to hold
the one you never told

I never liked to dance
I like it all the same
I took a second glance
it put me in a trance

Disappointments...

Oh please...

You've heard it all before...

[Yodasdad]

I quite like this but for me I think it needs another gear and a little more variety.

The choruses for example are memorable after a few listens, but not really distinct from the verses. Maybe a change of rhythm or playing style on the piano would help, or a new instrument introduced.

Yodasdad

[montydog]

Hi,

I completely agree with Yodasdad. There is a lovely song in there but you've not done it justice.

M

[fischermans]

I also agree with what both guys said. I think it is a work in progress and has much potential.
Alexander