[OscoBosco]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HpZqgxf_d1E

[cowparsleyman]

Hi Oscar

I like the video.

What a treat to be able to listen to something like this on this forum.

On listening to it, right from the start I felt the establishment of the motif on the right hand was hidden by the rhythmic complexity of the left hand, maybe build the left hand's complexity leading to the more complex phrasing maybe after the diminuendo part just after the first few bars, this will only add to the overall dynamic of the piece, while the individual dynamics of each phrase is good.

I also thought sometimes the accellerando sections were a little overused, and the subsequent themes were not allowed to establish themselves, which lead to a piece that sounds more like a stitching together of individual ideas rather than a crafted coherent piece.

I would recommend a camera gimbal for your video, if it was shot on an iphone, something like a zhiyun smooth 4 would help some of your tracking shots!

A very nice piece with some lovely individual phrases

Hope this helps.

Thanks

cpm

[tone]

Not much to add to what cowparsleyman said really. Some lovely, lovely bits, very well written and performed, just needs to feel a bit more joined together really. It's a treat to see someone who can play so well, well done

[OscoBosco]

Thanks so much guys. I'll definitely work on it.