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Empty Spaces

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Liam

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« on: October 04, 2018, 10:18:16 PM »
Not really a song but I just wanted to write something

This is about a man who has lost his wife and goes out to work everyday
inspired when listening to stop crying your heart out by oasis

Empty spaces

Lifting up the paving stones that weigh so heavy
at the end of the day looking for a pub and a bevy
that turns into more than one

trying to run away from the sun
happy to stare at the clouds that swirl in my glass
getting up each morning at half mast
how longer will this last

staring into empty spaces
trying to re-trace times and empty spaces of our life
trying to hide behind jokes and a fake laugh
and eyes that don't sparkle no more

going home to an empty house
and an empty fridge and bed
trying to forget and remember you at the same time

being told that time time will heal and seal the past away

Empty spaces , empty places
eyes that can hide from strangers but not from friends
sitting in the darkness, crying your heart out

all I want is to curl up and die
at the end of everyday
no homely touch no more
curtains not drawn from dusk to dawn

how can pain hurt so much
curled up in the fetal position 
nothing matters anymore , I don't care what's in store

You were my life , you were my life

Furry61

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« Reply #1 on: October 05, 2018, 02:23:32 PM »
I like the first 60% or so but it needs to finish on an up and not fall into the self pity trap. Always remember to write lyrics in mind for someone else to want to sing it.