konalavadome

Delicious Grace - The Boy From Memphis (demo)

  • 11 Replies
  • 392 Views

0 Members and 1 Guest are viewing this topic.

alcapone_dudu

  • *
  • Busker
  • *
  • Posts: 12
« on: September 17, 2018, 06:01:27 PM »
Hi guys. This is a song I wrote called ''The Boy from Memphis''. It's still in demo status but I really wanted to share it with Elvis' fans (I guess we've got a few around here).

A humble homage to one of the greatest singers of all time. Hope you enjoy:



Delicious Grace - The Boy From Memphis

==============================================

My previous song: http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?topic=13844.0

alcapone_dudu

  • *
  • Busker
  • *
  • Posts: 12
« Reply #1 on: September 17, 2018, 06:04:00 PM »
Lyrics - The Boy From Memphis

  
The way that he moves

Like he doesn’t care

May get you off guard

There’s no time to spare

 
It’s hard to explain

What to feel or what to say

I’m not gonna meet you

Goodbye, amazing grace
 

Walking in a velvet room

The feeling comes along

Is it roalty besides you?

You’re standing alone

 
Chorus:
Shake it, shake it, baby

(The boy from Memphis comes to town)

Shake it, shake it, baby

(He’s going to leave you in disguise)

 
To dress like a king

The legend lives on

Soulpower in your voice

We must carry on

 
Watching a silverscreen

A diferent kind of man

Is it magic or real life?

You can not decide

 
Chorus:
Shake it, shake it, baby

(The boy from Memphis comes to town)

Shake it, shake it, baby

(He’s going to leave you in disguise)


Ending:

Ooh Don’t let me go...

Altair

  • *
  • Busker
  • *
  • Posts: 25
« Reply #2 on: September 22, 2018, 01:55:20 PM »
Hi, Alcapone!

I like this song very much, it sounds interesting and catchy.

I think the special feature of it is the brassy section, I like it very much.
It definitely creates the right vibe for this track.
Is it recorded alive?

And drums too.

The song itself sounds as like of punk genre and that's a good combination of music and arrangement. 

Good job, thank you for posting!)

alcapone_dudu

  • *
  • Busker
  • *
  • Posts: 12
« Reply #3 on: September 24, 2018, 06:29:12 PM »
Thank you for taking the time to listen to my song, Altair. And I'm glad you liked it.

You've made a very good observation about the punk attitude towards this song. A while ago a producer told me exactly that. I've got a background in punk music for that matter so I tend to sing that way.

For the final cut of the song I'm planning on use real horn instruments to give a more real feel to the song and make it ''bigger sounding''.

cowparsleyman

  • *
  • Platinum Album
  • ****
  • Posts: 753
  • What would you rather be or a wasp?
    • Cowparsleyman on Soundcloud
« Reply #4 on: October 07, 2018, 08:33:55 AM »
Whato The DuDu meister.

A great effort indeed, first, I kinda like the analogue retro feel of the overall production, makes it sound like it's on a radio in the '70's which is a great touch.

I found some of the rhythm words a little forced and hurried, it might pay you to cut down on the number of words,and give em some air to breathe.

I thought the brass sounded OK, bring it down a tad in the mix, and you'll be fine.

As an arrangement, maybe lose the 2nd verse, like the vocal solo & piano.

has a lot going on then goes to nowt.

hope this helps (what did you record it on?)

cpm

alcapone_dudu

  • *
  • Busker
  • *
  • Posts: 12
« Reply #5 on: October 09, 2018, 01:43:48 PM »
Whato The DuDu meister.

A great effort indeed, first, I kinda like the analogue retro feel of the overall production, makes it sound like it's on a radio in the '70's which is a great touch.

I found some of the rhythm words a little forced and hurried, it might pay you to cut down on the number of words,and give em some air to breathe.

I thought the brass sounded OK, bring it down a tad in the mix, and you'll be fine.

As an arrangement, maybe lose the 2nd verse, like the vocal solo & piano.

has a lot going on then goes to nowt.

hope this helps (what did you record it on?)

cpm

Hey cpm! I'm glad you liked some of it. It means a lot.

Thank you for the detailed review. Some of your observations are really pertinent.

I recorded this song using a Zoom device called iQ6 and N-track software.

EveWilliams

  • *
  • Busker
  • *
  • Posts: 7
    • Eve Williams Music
« Reply #6 on: November 08, 2018, 11:19:43 PM »
The drums at the start are epic!!!

I would maybe mix up a few notes in the second verse section to avoid the melody getting too repetitive and think of adding a one or 2 line prechorus because the chorus melody 'shake it' bit really soars and it would be good to emphasise that a little.

It's a greatbtheme to write on... the tragic impossibility of meeting Elvis!!

I was in Nashville for a meeting at NSAI and a few if we Northern Irish writers decided to go to Graceland until we realised it was going to cost $185 on the bus. Next time I'm over there I'm going to hire a car and do that trip!

Lane1777

  • *
  • Busker
  • *
  • Posts: 24
« Reply #7 on: November 09, 2018, 08:45:24 PM »
to me everything does not have to be perfection in a demo..leaves room for change, I like the song.

mahircankucuk

  • *
  • Busker
  • *
  • Posts: 21
« Reply #8 on: November 12, 2018, 10:49:34 AM »
The soul is delivered very well! My initial critique would the the uncertainty - a little shakiness- in the rhythm of the chorus, the 2 parts are not complimenting/communicating with each other in a solid way.

Keep up the great work!

alcapone_dudu

  • *
  • Busker
  • *
  • Posts: 12
« Reply #9 on: November 13, 2018, 12:55:59 PM »
The drums at the start are epic!!!

I would maybe mix up a few notes in the second verse section to avoid the melody getting too repetitive and think of adding a one or 2 line prechorus because the chorus melody 'shake it' bit really soars and it would be good to emphasise that a little.

It's a greatbtheme to write on... the tragic impossibility of meeting Elvis!!

I was in Nashville for a meeting at NSAI and a few if we Northern Irish writers decided to go to Graceland until we realised it was going to cost $185 on the bus. Next time I'm over there I'm going to hire a car and do that trip!

Thank you, Eve. I'm really glad you liked some of it.

Elvis is still such an inspiration for me. The guy's voice is something else.

Please, when you do this visit to Graceland play my song over there. Joking.

alcapone_dudu

  • *
  • Busker
  • *
  • Posts: 12
« Reply #10 on: November 13, 2018, 12:57:46 PM »
to me everything does not have to be perfection in a demo..leaves room for change, I like the song.

Thank you, Lane. Paul Stanley from Kiss in his bio said something similar to your comment.

Glad you liked!
« Last Edit: December 01, 2018, 03:07:32 PM by alcapone_dudu »

alcapone_dudu

  • *
  • Busker
  • *
  • Posts: 12
« Reply #11 on: November 13, 2018, 01:00:17 PM »
The soul is delivered very well! My initial critique would the the uncertainty - a little shakiness- in the rhythm of the chorus, the 2 parts are not complimenting/communicating with each other in a solid way.

Keep up the great work!

Thank you for the heads up, Mahir. I could see some of what you've observed.