[Altair]

Hi!

My name is Alex, I'm a songwriter from Russia.
English is not my native language.

My music style is pop, indie-rock, ballads.

I have finished several recent songs and I want to know your opinion about them.
Are they worth working?
Are they Ok or maybe I need to involve somebody to modify them?

I’ll be very grateful to you if you read my lyrics and give me any recommendations (stylistics, rhyming, use of word, etc.)

Sorry for poor arrangement of demo track. Vocal line is shown with a sax voice.

Thank you!


Lyric is below.

[Altair]

JOURNEY (DEMO)

(1)

Give me an incentive
Like the feel of the dance
So I can be fine like I’m on holidays (on holidays)

I can be attentive
I catch every glance
And I’m sure we are friends, we are true soulmates (true soulmates)

(Chorus)
Cause when meet each other it’s like an incredible journey
There are so many mounds and bends
I got my clothes packed, I hope, I hope you will join me
I hope we’ll go along till the end

(2)
One glass of Mojito
Makes me feel alright
Oh, I never knew where I’d find my treasure (my treasure)

Street signage and windows
Reflect the sunlight
If you want us to walk, I’ll go with pleasure (with pleasure)

(Chorus)

(3)
That morning was easy (and) 
As sweet as a nap
The fact I met you it was like an accident (pure accident)

I came with no reason
Just looking for a chat
Your sense of humor and smile – they do fascinate (they fascinate)

(Chorus)
Cause when meet each other it’s like an incredible journey
There are so many mounds and bends
I got my clothes packed, I hope, I hope you will join me
I hope we’ll go along till the end