Hello songwriters. English is not my first language and I need you review and feedback on the below song
Below is a new song I'm working on:
To make your review easier I have added the SoundCloud link here:
https://soundcloud.com/klaus-rysoe/catch-them-v11-work-title -----------------------------------------------
Hello
Hello you life is here
Hey there you stranger
who live in the dark
feel the joy with the kids
get some sun in the park
Drop the restrictions
make a crack in the wall
a mothers protection
dont protect kids to fall
all of the way
to the end of day
your life will depends how
well the destiny play
Hold you
Hold you before you fly away
in sunset
the sunset will force you to stay
for the rest of your day
Hello
Hello you life is here
Over the years
generations evolve
some growing big and
some just get small
But all have a color
to show where we belong
but some getting mixed
then they cant find their song
all of the way
to the end of day
your life will depends how
well the destiny play
Hold you
Hold you before you fly away
in sunset
the sunset will force you to stay
for the rest of your day
