[Tamir Music]

Hey guys!

My name is Tamir and i'm a 25 singer/songwriter originally from Israel but I've spent the last year in Australia to promote my music. So the first stage that I ever played on was here in Melbourne since than I've played around 100 gigs all over the east and got a great reviews so I've decided to release one of my songs as a a single. The song that I've picked is the first song that I ever wrote and I tell the story behind it as I usually doing in gigs:)
I'm a singer/songwriter but just started few years ago, I was studying finance which is not close at all to music. This days I met one girl and had a lot of things to say to her but to be honest i'm not good at all in it, so iv'e decided to write it down. Few days later I picked up the guitar and somehow composed it quickly. The name of the song is "You Won't Fight Them On Your Own".
I've posted on YouTube an acoustic version for the song:

I would love to hear your thoughts and any feedback:)
By the way, I gonna work on this single in the UK so would love to hear any recommendations for producers and studios that usually work with this type of music.

Lyrics:

Your drawns your sinking islands
We gonna mend it we gonna make it
Thin surface covering deep pain
We’re gonna break it we’re gonna make it

And nothing else can wreck it all
I’ll guard your love with high brick walls

When you feel you’re down my darling
I’ll be the pillow for your bad thoughts
Even if it makes you selfish
I won’t leave you by yourself to fight them on your own

Your thrones your golden castles
We gonna build it no one but us can make it
This sun is ours on that vivid land
It makes the difference just the way we paint it

And nothing else can wreck it all
I’ll be the one to catch you when you’ll fall

When you feel you’re down my darling
I’ll be the pillow for your bad thoughts
Even if it makes you selfish
I won’t leave you by yourself
You won’t fight them
Fight them on your own


Thanks and have a great weekend,
Tamir.

[pompeyjazz]

Hi Tamir and welcome to the forum. It's a well put together little ditty. Nice acoustic ambience and vocals with a lot of emotion. It does seem to me to be fairly similar to a lot of stuff that is being produced today but I thought that your vocals gave it a real cutting edge  Your will find that if you review some songs and get involved in the forum you will get lots of useful feedback. There is all sorts of music here  All the best, John

[hardtwistmusic]

First impression:   GOD I WISH I COULD PLAY GUITAR LIKE THAT. 

Second impression:  Wonderfully written music and lyric. 

Third impression:   GOD I WISH I COULD PLAY GUITAR LIKE THAT. 

[RealKevM]

Really good mate. A couple of issues with the lyrics, the opening line - i'm not sure what 'your drawns' means and the 'covering' in the third line sounds like you are using a word that's too long to fit in the gap if that makes sense? Sorry i'm nitpicking I guess, it's a really good song.