[rightly]

These lyrics want to become my latest song
Where the crosses XX are is a missing bridge
Can anyone get with the lyrics and perhaps suggest something for the bridge?
sometimes ideas from anyone else can take the song in a completely new direction.
           I just thought I'd try this out. I know, it is a long shot. 



shimmering gold


   a hard skin to crawl under
 when you can’t get with the joke
     ev’ryone is a foreigner
 they want to see you up in smoke
 burning, burning up in smoke
burning, burning down real slow

 friends looking on, vaguely confused
    cannot be expected to know
 black dog bites blindingly cruel
pain has the colours of shimmering gold
 burning, burning, shimmering gold
  burning, burning down real slow

  what of all the summer rain?

      laughter from another room
 all the windows and doors are closed
     no exit here, enter the fool
  one way mirror, a real live show
  burning, burning, shimmering gold
 burning, burning down real slow

  burning, burning, shimmering gold
    burning, burning down real slow
       shimmering gold


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[redrhodie]

Hi Rightly,

I've been thinking about this, and maybe this is too cliche, but I keep getting the imagery of the Phoenix rising from the ashes. I think that might change the meaning of the lyrics too much, but what the hell, it's an idea.

[philbee]

My inclination is to use the Bridge as an overview on pleasure in contrast to the 'pain' in the verses.

[Tor Løvstad]

My inclination is to use the Bridge as an overview on pleasure in contrast to the 'pain' in the verses.

Agreed. This will give the song contrast and drive the story forwards. But it´s up to you. Hope it helped. Best wishes, Tor Løvstad

[rightly]

My inclination is to use the Bridge as an overview on pleasure in contrast to the 'pain' in the verses.

Agreed. This will give the song contrast and drive the story forwards. But it´s up to you. Hope it helped. Best wishes, Tor Løvstad

Well, thanks to those who commented.

I've changed the lyrcis ever so little and worked plenty on the music.
I'll try to record it today, along with another four other songs

It isn't mixed and the bridge is musically unfinished. I don't want to wait anymore.