[Altair]

Hi!
I am a young (?) songwriter from Russia and I now I'm trying to write some lyrics in English for my songs. English is not my native language though.
My music style is pop, indie-rock, ballads.

I’ll be very grateful if you read (proofread) my lyrics, show me any mistakes or give me any comments and recommendations (stylistics, rhyming, grammar, use of word, etc.) Maybe you say that something sounds bizarre and unnatural.

I am not very ambitious about that. I want to record a good demo in order to attract attention, find companions and co-authors.

Sorry for poor arrangement of demo track. Vocal line is shown with a sax voice.

https://soundcloud.com/user-72483902/magical-treedemo

Thank you!

[Altair]

MAGICAL TREE

(1)
Look
Behind this wall                   
There is a magical tree
With beautiful balmy flowers

And we -
We can recall                      
We can learn how to be free
And have ours finest hour          (Var.: And how to work wonders)
   
(Chorus)
Hey
You were my angel
In this stuffy haze                      
Stay (stay with me)                     
Keep me from dangers
Of this awful maze                      
Tell me the truth
Show me the nature                     
Of this sacred blaze                         
And I’ll put in a good word for you in heaven

(2)
Find
A secret key
To all of these boxes and doors,
Look around And toss a coin                
                           
Run          
Invisibly
Up to the higher floors,
And here's a viewing point         

(Chorus)

(3)
Wait
Just take a look
And you can see this vanity fair      
And all of its avid players                  

And here is
A massive Book –
Of their lives; You can be aware    
Of all of their wins and failures