Hey
@CaliaMoko ...
Late to this I know and I got sucked into the discussion on the lyrics....... so I thought I'd give my tuppence worth
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Firstly - I really like the song. But then I'm a folkie at heart so that's not surprising. You've a lovely tone to your voice and the simple guitar arrangement is lovely (nice guitar playing I would agree!).
On the lyrics you're playing with, I think you can keep the "do" in "I do believe" and reduce the rushing by changing the emphasis a little. You're singing 'I...do.be.lieve' but if you put equal emphasis on all 4 syllables of 'I.do.be.lieve' starting just on beat 4 of the previous bar so 'do' is sung where you are now singing 'I'? I'm not sure if that makes sense? I can record a snippet for you to demonstrate if you wish... Now, I think it works as is but since you're playing around with it...
Also (and you might hate this idea) but why not swap around Honey Pie and I moan and sigh and sing "I moan and sigh, my honey pie...." as it avoids you starting with Honey Pie if that's disturbing you....
Anyway, lovely song - look forward to hearing the next iteration
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Karen