[Almosthumanrobot]

Hey guys, wanted to share this song with you, as I'm very curious what you all think
I tried to capture a nostalgic feeling with it. It's about a love that's not returned.

This is drive: https://soundcloud.com/themis2/drive

Let me know what you think, all feedback is appreciated!

We're feeling something
Don't know what still
I'll promise nothing
I can't fulfill

The world on our feet
And we believe
Anything concrete
We can achieve

And I'll do everything everything dear
You just gotta fight through the fight through the fear
But you just push me you push me aside
I'm on the ground on the ground I'm alright

You drive it away
''

[staticmusic]

I love it.

Starts off really eerie which is great but builds into a really catchy melody.

Being a rocker, I'd personally want to build up to something heavy and get a real prog-rock edge to it - especially at the end.  But that's just me wanting to hear someone kick the crap out of a drum kit haha!

Great track, though. Gorgeous melody.

[Liam]

Hi didn’t really do it for me I was waiting and waiting for something to happen I would have liked it to get going a bit quicker

[Almosthumanrobot]

@staticmusic thanks for listening man! Yeah for this song I went for a bit of a slower sound. I know most people on this forum prefer a heavier rock sound, but I was trying to do things a bit differently, also for myself. Migth try to make a new version in the future where I do go all out at the end.

@Katieoasis Yeah I get that, guess you are right that the part after the guiar build up is better than the stuff that comes before. I'll keep it in mind while making my next songs.

[Skub]

@Almosthumanrobot

I'd caught this one a few days ago on s/c and as usual thought I'd commented on here!

I like the deep,brooding synth in the first part of the song and the build up when the guitar enters the picture,bringing in the drums.

It works as it is,but I think it would give the song a kick if the vocals in the second half were on a higher register and going for it. Maybe you were aiming for a laid back 'Lou Reed' vibe and if so,that's fine. Just a thought. 

[mickyplankton]

yeah. its a cool track, but as the others have said it doesnt quite get into fourth gear (sorry about the pun). you need to go full throttle towards the end. it would help if you bring the drums up in the mix

[rightly]

This is peculiar for me   
I do like it.
I really appreciate your style, seems effortlessly unique. 

I don't know how you could make this better but finally the track seems nothing more than promising.

I suspect you have a whole to offer. 

[LostBoy]

Hey man,
I love the build on this and the lyrics and melody are cool.
I think you need to revisit the transition from soft to loud as the song builds. The idea is great, but the execution is a bit abrupt imho. I think the quieter vocal needs to come up in the mix a bit. I’m no expert, but I would use similar songs as reference tracks, listen to how they do it and try your best to imitate there mix (easier said than done I know)

I enjoyed my listens mate. 

[Andyb]

the build up is cool and the most interesting part of the song. (don't hate me but) coldplay are the masters of the build up, an sparked a real trend for that kind of thing a few years back. I know you are not trying to be like anyone else but a cool, simple guitar melody here with the build up would maybe lift it to another level ? also you maybe want to get to it a little earlier at least the mid way point of the song and the vocals should really build in intensity with the music? Just my opinion, i liked it though, pretty cool and it was different which is what it's all about

[MonnoDB]

Hi @Almosthumanrobot!

Love the guitar when it comes in around the 1.30 mark. That was enough build for me - I really enjoyed it actually. Maybe cos I’d read a few of the comments I expected no build but it really worked for me. Moody start and enticing sounds - I really loved it. Really like your sound - will be checking out more of your stuff!
K

[Almosthumanrobot]

Thanks for listening everybody, it's greatly appreciated. I will give and update in the future on how the track has developed for sure!

[Tor Løvstad]

You got something going here!
The melody line is good.
Your use of repetition in your lyrics at the chorus is good.
I like your lyrics.

Still I feel like this song at some parts lacks a underlying structure.
At the chorus; I would have liked if there were more voices in the backing vocals - but thats just my taste.
All in all a good result!

Keep up the good work.

Best wishes
Tor Løvstad

[Cawproductions]

Hi Dude.

I am a bit late to this track.
Like the vibe with the low bass but that early section needs to be louder but still retaining its stripped back vibe.
Vocal was nice,

Overall I reckon you captured the feeling that you were going for....

For me it was very quiet at the start.

Great work
Andy