[pompeyjazz]

A cautionary tale about middle aged men trying to rediscover their youth. It's been hard work recording vocals especially in this heat.

Cheers

John


Your Last Holiday

Flying away for a week
Got so excited, can't even speak
Spending some time with the lads
Well stocked with cheap booze and fags

You spent every day, just drinking away
Time in your new found paradise
You danced every night and got in a fight
But hey ! The lads would help you out

Out on a boat for a day
Conditions perfect, nothing to say
Let's say it's time for a swim
Tanked up with copious amounts of gin

You plunged through the waves, and sank to the depths
Onto the rocky ocean floor
As your mind lost control, you started to pray
But there was no one to save you

Your last holiday - Your last holiday
The one you went away – The one you went away
Couldn't find what you were looking for
Won't be coming back no more

Flying you home in a week
Everyone's – Going to weep
What a waste of a life
There's the kids, kids and the your wife

You spent every day, just drinking away
Time in your new found paradise
You danced in the night
No one there would help you out

Your last holiday - Your last holiday
The one you went away – The one you went away
Couldn't find what you were looking for
Won't be coming back no more
 
(c) Bradley - 2018

[Liam]

I really like this lyrics are great , voice really works , some of the other music bits you added are really good -don’t know what they are
A really good feel about it only thing I wondered if a chorus might pull it all together a bit

Katie - still 9/10 from me

[RealKevM]

Your output is profilic mate. I really like the way you can take a subject that perhaps not many people would think of writing a song about and putting it to work (i've noticed this in a lot of your songs). The outcome is original ideas and subjects. I#'m sure you don't need me to keep bigging you up. I really enjoyed this song and the subject matter thank you.

[rightly]

i really enjoyed this

I'm an evergreen myself, approaching 50!
lol

your skills with taking an obscure theme n making a song out of it
are admirable. you're an inspiration, mental in the best way!

[pompeyjazz]

@Katieoasis - Glad you liked it - The "Your last holiday" refrain is supposed to be the chorus 

@RealKevM - Thank you. I often try and devise little stories before I start writing lyrics. I'm trying to write one about junk mail at the moment 

@Rightly - That is much appreciated. Unfortunately I'm well on my way to the next milestone 

[Liam]

Oh sorry Pompey really liked it

[Mikey]

Another hit Pompey. well played and another nice vocal, it has an 80's feel to me and sounds very authentic, great lyrics, definitely strikes a chord with us oldies.

Cheers, Mikey

[pompeyjazz]

Cheers @Mikey Hey we're mere babies man 

[Neil C]

John,
Interesting photo are you in it?
Tells the observation story well.
Liking the synths, it has a slight feel of Style Council
Verses all good, I think the chorus could be a bit more differentiated,so it’s more distinctive? 
Currently is mainly your second vocal. So maybe some percussion and additional musical layers, maybe synth strings to lift it a bit?
Anyway a warning to us all, although I doubt he’d listen long enough!
 
Neil

[pompeyjazz]

@Neil C - Yes, didn't you recognise me ? See what you're saying about the chorus 

[SlavaB]

Hi John,

I love the space of a melody synth in a soundtrack. Your voice is awesome and sits great on the song. When I listened it from the beginning until the end I felt myself like im sitting at Miami beach with a nice cocktail on the sunset, and wind breezes me around. Sequencer is great too.


Overall is very professional work. Loved it.


Thanks for sharing.
Best Regards,
Slava B.

[Skub]

Yo Pomps.

A novel approach to the lyrical content. Great idea!

I agree with Neil concerning the chorus,but it's a fairly minor point.

Solid stuff John.   

[montydog]

Hi,

First things first - what a great vocal. You have real grit and character - it makes the song compelling to listen to. I like everything about this - it's original, clever and has a black humour which I like. I think this might be my favourite song of yours.

Fabulous stuff.

M