*On Hold*

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ScottLevi

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« on: June 12, 2018, 01:11:50 PM »
EDIT
Guitar is unintentionally way out of tune - my ears couldn't tell my phone could 😂. Pending re-record


Heyas,

Fresh off the press this morning (but well finished by my standards), here's probably my strongest solo effort for a good while, posted on here at least.

Anyway this is a subject which has been bugging me, though not quite focused it's broadly about  perception. I mean who we think we are isn't always correct - we have our ideals and principles that we try to stick by, but do we? So are others a better judgement as they don't have that personal bias? Feel like dangerous territory doing that too..

What Do You See


Chorus
What do you see
When you're looking at me
I keep looking in the mirror
Thinking whwat I could be

Your perception seems
So far wrong
And my perception just
Doesn't get along

What do you see
When you're looking at me
I keep looking in the mirror
Thinking whwat I could be

v1
Judgement, because we nothing alike
But I don't know why that means i'm not right
Hetred, at the thought & sight
And finally I see you in your true light

Severing, the respect that I had
Doesn't matter what's true 'vos your view's are had
Dissapointment, at the world around
How we talk like we move but we're stuck to the ground

<chorus>

v2
Discrimination, is very alive
And it makes me feel like we're barely alive
Gut punch gut punch then you dare me to drive
And watch as I vear right off a cliff side

Set up to fail, drained of hope
Act like we're there but there's far to go
The ignorant; don't want to know
The dark within can't help but show

<Chorus>

break
You always know the
Right thing to say
Yoy always have the
Right game to play

<chorus>

As always any time given to look, listen, read or give feedback is much appreciated.

All the best,
Scott.
« Last Edit: June 20, 2018, 11:07:20 AM by ScottLevi »

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« Reply #1 on: June 12, 2018, 02:56:08 PM »
Hey Scott,

This is my favorite song of yours so far. It really sounds like you're developing your style and it's so cool and unique sounding. I love the concept and the lyrics. I love the funky tuning on the guitar. Awesome song.

If I had to offer one criticism, I'd say maybe one repeat less at the end wouldn't be a bad thing, but it does make it stick, so maybe I'm wrong about that. Haha. Anyway, I always look forward to hearing your songs. This one's a keeper.

Lynn


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« Reply #2 on: June 12, 2018, 04:13:10 PM »
Hey,

I had a hard time listening to this. I think your lyrics are great and you are making your point well. But the detuned guitar got me. I think it's a cool idea to leave it untuned and it fits the theme of the song, but it makes it too hard for me. So my tip to you is to tune your guitar man!!

With love
Tommy Blixt