Hey all, I've been working on this track for about a week now... I'd like some feedback on melody and lyrics since I'm not 100% convinced, I do like the production though which I could use again for some other idea.
Here's the link:
https://soundcloud.com/francis_bean/my-sweetheart-back-in-kansas/s-W9LjFand lyrics:
It's been so long since I've been home
crossing half the country on my own
when behind the clouds I see the rainbow
I dream about my sweetheart back in Denver
I spent my whole life beneath an Oak tree
singing all those songs about the hippies
sometimes when I forget the good old days
I dream about my sweetheart back in L.A
The dead of night gives me no relief
can they move on without me
the dead of night only drives me crazy
who knows if they're still waiting?
Pumpkins, Halloween and the country show
I always win the last prize or get drunk
When I lose track of where I'm going
I dream about my sweetheart in Wyoming
Now I have a home south of Texas
I wish I wasn't living all alone
I wonder if I'm wasting all my time
still thinking bout my sweetheart back in Kansas.
The dead of night gives me no relief
can they move on without me
the dead of night only drives me crazy
who knows if they're still waiting?
I'm spending my last days in Boston
trying to give this life a meaning
When I lock back there's too much fog
I'm missing my family down in Houston
I can hear the reaper call my name,
he's trying to haunt me for the past
If only I could live this all again
I'd never leave my sweetheart back in Kansas
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So... I really liked the title, thought it was strong maybe the song is a bit static. Curious to get some feedback. thanks!