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Brancaster - A song about a hot day by the seaside

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« Reply #15 on: May 11, 2018, 10:30:32 AM »
@adamfarr - Thanks very much for your comments, glad you caught the vibe of the Day, every sunny day there is a like the song, so I guess it's easy to write.

What would you substitute the go-oh-woh with, I might just go-oh-woh with your idea, as I too think it's a bit cheesy, and a straight gooooo might sound a bit flat?

Hmmm what starts with S on the beach...Can I invite you as a co-lyricist to add the extra lines...

I'm right up fort he punk drum challenge, but I fear I'm out of time for that now, I'll do the next one, just to say it wouldn't be anything like punk...but some other genre.

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« Reply #16 on: May 11, 2018, 11:06:51 AM »
Great summery vibe and a really nice listen.

Super guitar solo in the middle there as well.

Horrible story about the lost child though. Funny how different the lyrics read after seeing that at the end of your post...

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« Reply #17 on: May 11, 2018, 11:19:53 AM »
@tboswell - Thanks very much for the listen, and the compliment about my solo, I think it was then I started looking into that style of solo, I think it's kinda Country and Western sort of thing, I just wanted to see if I could do it...Do you know 'The Claw' by Jerry Donahue?, now that's a guy who can play...



I was there not long before it happened, I felt like I didn't deserve to have such a nice day. I always spare a thought for him when I go there, so many folk don't enough look at his memorial plaque, as they curse the queue for the toilets or the price of a magnum...

Hope you enjoy Jerry.

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« Reply #18 on: May 11, 2018, 12:02:48 PM »
Do you know 'The Claw' by Jerry Donahue?, now that's a guy who can play...

Ooohh...I don't know that. He has some really tidy finger work going on. Wow!

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« Reply #19 on: May 11, 2018, 12:20:40 PM »
I'd be happy just to have his sense of rhythm

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« Reply #20 on: May 11, 2018, 12:22:28 PM »
Hmmm what starts with S on the beach...


Sand of course, not what you were thinking of...!

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« Reply #21 on: May 11, 2018, 12:57:14 PM »
Could have been one of these

Sellafield
Sh*te
Stupid
Sharp
Scorchio
Scher-wing
Schofferhoffer
Sainsburys disposable barbeque, but that's kinda tricky to rhyme, maybe @redrhodie could fit it in...
etc....

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« Reply #22 on: May 11, 2018, 06:28:52 PM »
Hi,
What a lovely song.
You paint a great picture with your lyrics and the vocal delivery is spot on!
Johnny :)

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« Reply #23 on: May 12, 2018, 11:53:29 AM »
Could have been one of these

Sellafield
Sh*te
Stupid
Sharp
Scorchio
Scher-wing
Schofferhoffer
Sainsburys disposable barbeque, but that's kinda tricky to rhyme, maybe @redrhodie could fit it in...
etc....

cpm

Oh, it would be a very different song if I had at it. I'd ruin it. Here's a segment of my beach song:

"The kid twirled his whistle around on a string
He didn't notice you were drowning"

Haha.

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« Reply #24 on: May 12, 2018, 03:37:51 PM »
Thats brilliant Lynn, please finish it...

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« Reply #25 on: May 14, 2018, 08:57:37 AM »
What would you substitute the go-oh-woh with?


There are a few options:
- choose a note and stick to it (usually sounds better than you think - in verse 1 you could go with the 2 note like the first "so")
- let the instruments finish of the musical idea (often they do anyway)
- use BVs to fill in the gap (e.g. oh-oh or repeating the end of the phrase - "to go" etc. - in verse 2 and the verse 1 repeat this would work I think)


Just some ideas (keep or sweep as they say)!

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« Reply #26 on: May 14, 2018, 02:07:39 PM »
Thanks Adam

Sandy tops, sorry Handy tips (couldn't resist it...from the misheard lyrics...

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« Reply #27 on: May 18, 2018, 07:41:51 AM »
 Good Morning cowparesleyman,

Lovely tune. Very cheeeeeesy music :) Keep up with a good work, nice track!

Best Regards,
Slava B.

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« Reply #28 on: May 18, 2018, 09:02:41 AM »
Good Morning cowparesleyman,

Lovely tune. Very cheeeeeesy music :) Keep up with a good work, nice track!

Best Regards,
Slava B.

Yeah I agree, really cheesey, cheesier that a lump of Cheddar in a cheese fondue, it just came out that way. But you're right...

Regards

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« Reply #29 on: May 18, 2018, 10:16:12 AM »
Good Morning cowparesleyman,

Lovely tune. Very cheeeeeesy music :) Keep up with a good work, nice track!

Best Regards,
Slava B.

Yeah I agree, really cheesey, cheesier that a lump of Cheddar in a cheese fondue, it just came out that way. But you're right...

Regards

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