[man of simple pleasures]

arite rock n rollers!

Hey MODS, please delete this or the other thread i started if i’ve got the section to stick this in wrong?

http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/index.php?topic=15205.0

so i’m thinkng this is a finished as at this moment, yes not the perfectly produced creation i’d like it to be so i see this as a finished demo...

was in mobster movie vibes when i wrote this one if anyone wants to have a listen and let me know what ya think!
cheers!

https://soundcloud.com/man-of-simple-pleasures/the-mob-city-demo

theres been a heart attack!!
its ripped through the city,
as a shadow streches
behind your eyes..

yeah the deals been done!!
but dare you pull the trigger?
as the soul of the city
is ripped through the skies...

so wise up, come along or get left behind..
feel the heat on the street
as the mob runs the beat in this old town...

so rise up, come along or get left behind...
with the heat on the street
but the mob runs the beat in this old town!

theres been a heart attack!!
machine gun tommies,
ripping holes through the city
on a stormy night..

so rise  up, come along or get left behind..
feel the heat on the street
as the mob runs the beat in this old town...

squeling little rat in a cop borrowed suit,
with 20-20 vision the rookies got the loot...
rules have changed, keep your head in the game...

so rise up, come along or get left behind..
feel the heat on the street
as the mob runs the beat in this old town...

https://soundcloud.com/man-of-simple-pleasures/the-mob-city-demo

[SlavaB]

Hi there,

Very nice quite song, at the start of it I though.... hmmm too much reverb on vocal ? but going further it kind of settled down a bit. I like the idea, but I think the track its self sounds a little bit empty. I think adding bassline would fill that empty space and personally I would adjust the saturation of the guitar and your vocal EQ. Looking forward to hear this track once finished

[rightly]

On listening I was surprised with how quickly it grew on me.
Very good lyrics. 


As slavab. Mentioned improvements can be made but I like it the way it is too.