[montydog]

Hi Peeps,

Here's another from me. This is about keeping people captive and/or moving them around the world either illegally by terrorists or legally by governments without trial or access to legal representation. I guess Guantanamo is the best known example. I hope I managed to convey something of what is must be like.

M

https://soundcloud.com/alan-walker-4/rendition

I'm sick of these walls
The endless halls
These blues, the greys
And the silence

Broken bones
Weathered stones
Speak to me
In a whisper

I'm falling, spinning round
Settle softly on the ground
I don't know where you're taking me
I don't know why you're breaking me
Just send me
Home

This is the cruelest cradling
To hear the song I cannot sing
Please take me
Home

Set me free
On an empty sea
With the salt, the spray
Of the tradewinds
I've learned much more
On this foreign shore
Than all the words
Of your schooling

I'm falling, spinning round
Settle softly on the ground
I don't know where you're taking me
I don't know why you're breaking me
Just send me
Home

This is the cruelest cradling
To hear the song I cannot sing
Please take me
Home

A bottle of rain
Sweet champagne
Taste the same
When you're drowning
Your lips are cold
The truth you told
Turned out to be
Just empty dreaming

Lock the door
Fevered floor
It's a cold bed
No ones listening

[Wicked Deeds]

Hello Alan,

It's good to hear you experimenting with different themes and musical approaches.  I think that you made the right choice to focus on the vocal and subdued instrumentation. I stay away from such topics, mainly because I would have to write from the perspective of an observer of a story or journalistic account.  perhaps, I should attempt to do something that's embodies more of a social commentary about current events.  Still, your writing is to be admired.  I have watched you go from strength to strength over many years my friend.

Wicked!

[Johnnyuk]

Hi Alan,
I like the mood and you sing it very well but for me lyrically imo it is too cryptic. I didn't get the songs message BUT there is a solution. Actually two solutions.
In your description you talk about this songs message. Those details should be in the chorus section to give us the listener resolution. Once we hear the chorus and it lets us know your in prison at guantanamo bay then all the verse lyrics will make sense and even more sense on each additional listen to us the listener. Solution No2 is even better...Keep it cryptic, exactly as it is but change the title to Guantanamo Bay. This way we learn from the title alone exactly where you are and why you are saying these words.

Both ways will help tell us listening know exactly what you are talking about.
Other than that i thoroughly enjoyed it. A great mood with a crystal clear vocal.

Johnny

PS: Just had a thought. The last few lines you could change to... At Guantanamo bay, you don't hear the screams, because no one here, is listening.

PS again lol Did you research this subject Alan? If not then do a quick google search about that place and see if you can find people who spent time their talking about their experience cos that should give you even more ammunition/lyrics to add even more depth and truth to your song.

[rightly]

very nice song.
with the right amount of production.

"home", the reoccurring theme. Lovely.

[Sterix]

Surprisingly... nice. A haunting, sad quality to it. Nice lyrics.

[Neil C]

Alan,

Fabulous vocal performance, the best I've heard from you. The lyrics are deep and love the sax ending.
My only thought was the piano was slightly too quiet and sounded like it was in a different room compared to the vocals.
Definitely upped your game.
:-)
neil

[Movin Flavour]

Very solemn song on a very interesting topics.

Your vocals dominate the song and create a chilling ambience and you .sing really well.

A good listen.

Sandeep

[Skub]

Yo Alan.

I absolutely love this lyrically.

I particularly enjoy the open endedness (new word) and the ambiguity,leaving the listener to put their own interpretation on the song. I understood it perfectly.

Musically it's perfectly adjoined to that ambiguity.

Great work man.

[nooms]

knockout
slowly knocked out
outro sealed it
vocal and lyric
piano and arrangmnt sax wooo
great stuff alan

wouldnt call it anything else either.. works for all seasons
nail on head

[Jack_Diamond.]

Ah man this is so great. The sax ending is just perfect! The lyrics took me to a different place!

[delb0y]

Lovely work, as always, Alan. Tough subject to deal with, but you've nailed the solitary feel and the loneliness and the hopelessness. Imagery is lovely and the sax ending is inspired. It's a great sound, too, and is the perfect length for the subject matter, pace, content. Well done.

[LostBoy]

I’ve gotta say, I enjoyed that mate. Lovely simple arrangement (not to be confused with not being difficult to arrange  ) that allows the listener to focus on the words and their delivery. You sound great as always. Lyrics are fab, my fave is the “bottle of rain, sweet champagne, taste the same when you’re drowning”. That’s a glorious line. 

I agree with Johnny Uks awesome idea of maybe changing the title to Guantanamo Bay, that will put the listener immediately in the room with the singer, without too much guesswork.

Great stuff buddy. 

[Paulski]

Nice one Alan - your smooth vocals are the star here.
Very brave of you to put them center stage like that but they demand attention and hold the listener to the end.
For me it could have ended perfectly right before the sax solo which seemed to take it to another place.

Well done - the bar has been raised again

Paul

[Mutrins]

Really cool song. Love the vibe, lyrics and the message. LOVE the sax at the end...whaaaaaaaaaat. yes yes yes.

Bravo!

[Jamie]

Hi Alan, you've gone for a very sparse arrangement and that works very well to highlight the very smooth vocals. Love the bluesy outro, tops the song off very nicely. Your production and playing skills have improved immensely over the years Ive been listening to you.
Good stuff
Cheers
Jamie