MY SIXTH DEMO TRACK "WATER OF LIFE"

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Robbie S

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« on: April 10, 2018, 02:40:19 PM »
Hi folks,

Some great music emerging from this forum, especially liking he work of KNmac and his advice of lyric writing has been a real eye opener, I'm not there yet, but improvements will come I'm sure.

Ok as usual any feedback on this my most rushed demo track yet greatfuly received, some say I should not rush writing songs and I wish that were the case, but for me it's important to keep writing and moving onto the next song, it keeps things fresh for me and hopefully I can get some growth / development too.

In terms of lyrics / theme it started out being about addiction but it kinda went a bit pear-shaped!


WATER OF LIFE

https://soundcloud.com/user-53270383/water_of_life


V1

Breathing, aching, shifting cold,   

We’ve got plans to change the world

We got time, time to burn,

We got love in our hands

Q

We got the faith, we got the time
We got the love in our hands

 
V2

Growing strains, feeling old

We’ve got dreams to rule the world

We got faith, faith to lie Ω

We got love in our hands


Q2

We got the faith, we got the time
We got the love in our hands

I drank from the water of life
Couldn't find my way back home




« Last Edit: April 10, 2018, 02:43:20 PM by Robbie S »

Johnnyuk

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« Reply #1 on: April 10, 2018, 05:05:05 PM »
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« Reply #2 on: April 12, 2018, 12:58:49 PM »
Hi Robbie

Just keep writing, the more you do the more you're likely to stumble on something magical.

Not too keen on this one, although there is nothing really wrong with, just not my thing, I like it that you spend a lot of time on the BVox, that's so often overlooked, as it takes a lot of time and juxtaposition, and mixing, did you use a BVox buss and a separate LVox channel?

Keep em coming, I'll always take a listen to your stuff.

Regards

cpm