[jonlint]

Hi all,

Working on a new song idea.  Recorded an instrumental track and wrote some lyrics this morning.  I suspect the music without lyrics may not sound inspiring yet, but I feel the lyrics will take the song to a new level.

Before I merge the two, feedback on what I have so far is welcome.

DENIAL
(Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton)

Deep down, inside of me
Is a deep, gaping hole
Down in there, is a fire
Burning out of control

I can’t take this any more
It burns me to the core
All you see’s one side of the aisle
Faced with the facts
All we get, is, a denial

Denial, of the truth
Denial, of the youth
Denial, of end of times
This time, it’s we, that will, deny you!

Far away, you waged war
In a fear, of horrific weapons
A blind eye, you deny
Daily home aggression

I can’t take this any more
Our voice you can’t ignore
All you see’s one side of the aisle
Faced with the facts
All we get, is, a denial

Denial, of the truth
Denial, of the youth
Denial, of end of times
This time, it’s we, that will, deny you!

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/denial-rough-demo-without-lyrics

[Johnnyuk]

Hi,
Musically it sounds great! I won't be able to give you an honest review without hearing the vocal on it tbh.
But from just reading your lyrics i think your chorus lyrics are not clear enough. The entire chorus lyric is really strong for the most part until the last line. To me that last line doesn't give me resolution. If in the last line you had said something like.. all politicians lie or are in denial. Then that would give me the resolution that i need because that is very true. All politicians do lie and are in denial so i would consider making that point in your song.
I hope this helps and i look forward to hearing how your lyrics fit in with your music.
Johnny

[jonlint]

Recorded the first two verses and choruses.  Still work in progress.  Feedback welcome:

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/denial-v1

[Robbie S]

Woha, what a vocal, pure Rock Passion!

The song vibe kinda reminds me of Black Sabbath / Ozzy.

Like the guitar riff and drums too.

The words are serious, this is not funny and I can feel you're anger!

I think it's great, and when you get you're guitar solo in place and a the few tweaks you mentioned then a properly quality rock track, nice job, ready to sell, release etc??

In terms of the lyrics, I'm having issues my self and need to improve so I don't want to say anything about them at this stage.

[jonlint]

Worked further on the song structure.  Here is an updated demo.  I would like to retrack the vocals and guitars as they are no in timing and key in places.  Feedback welcome on what I have so far however:

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/denial-v2