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Just a chorus

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Rob3rt

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« on: March 29, 2018, 10:07:59 PM »
Just had an idea for a chorus. I’ve never really wrote songs before but I thought I’d try it out. This came about from the new Shawn Mendes track “Lost in Japan” and it wasn’t what I expected, so I decided to write down what I thought the song would sound like judging by the title. All feedback is appreciated!
Thanks

And maybe we could just get away
Maybe even just for a day
And you say maybe we can...
...Go get lost in Japan
Go get lost in Jap-a-an
Get lost in Japan
Go get lost in Jap-a-an

I haven’t got onto a verse yet as I wanted to get some thoughts on the chorus before I continue with writing the song. Any advice for writing lyrics is also much appreciated!

Mike67

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« Reply #1 on: March 30, 2018, 11:58:26 AM »
Feels like a prechorus and chorus to me; nothing at all wrong with the words. Now get on and write the choruses.🤓

Katie Wilson

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« Reply #2 on: April 01, 2018, 08:36:30 AM »
Maybe incoperate a story into it xxx

forth_loft

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« Reply #3 on: April 04, 2018, 07:13:57 AM »
I like what you wrote! Please, keep us updated! Katie is right, if you incorporate a story into it will be great, and easier to finish it. Do you have an idea yet?
Regards,
E.C.

Miss Stagefright

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« Reply #4 on: April 26, 2018, 01:03:07 AM »
i saw this and thought of this verse, you can have it if you want it:
Its late on a friday night
we've been workin hard all day, all week, all year
you say to me baby lets do somethin crazy
anything but just stay here
(insert your chorus)
« Last Edit: April 26, 2018, 03:46:57 PM by stagefrightsinger »